


. That doesn't nessecarely mean Willow will fit into the Order and its rules. Don't really see why she should either, surely there's life outside the Order?
Nice to see Tara felt something that night, esp. since she has now told Willow about it.
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When you say "conflict", I kinda imagine that you had a problem with what I had done. But it looks to me that you didn't. Am I correct in that assumption?
variety.“I know. It’s just…y’know, keeping within the rules of the Jedi and all…”
Tara couldn’t help but let out a small chuckle. “And yet you’re about to kiss me again.”
Willow blushed. “What can I say? I like to color outside the lines once and a while.”
Great line, mate!Gunray turned to leave the throne room, his mind now on what he would do when this was all over.
So Tara saved Willow from being dismissed from the Jedi. It's a good job that she took notice of the feeling she had the first time she met Willow.


Master Yoda might have been correct in seeing there is a lot of goodness in Willow, she does usually want to do good... true. That doesn't nessecarely mean Willow will fit into the Order and its rules.
Don't really see why she should either, surely there's life outside the Order?
Both Tara and Willow would do well to keep their guard up. Planet is at war remember?
Keeping their relation secret is never going to work long-term. Might as well make the choice early on and life with it. If the Jedi Order opposes such relations, so what? Enjoy life, you only live once you know.

Right now, you asked me a question earlier, and laggard that I am, I'm only just now answering it. Consider me abashed, mon ami.
Oh, right ... whoops. Forgot the part where I actually give an answer.
Now, what I was trying to say was that I didn't have a problem with what you'd written, it was more that I was personally conflicted over whether or not what happened was a good thing in the SW universe.
I could waffle on further about how they are risking everything they've dedicated their lives to, on the basis of nothing more than chemistry and an unspoken attraction. At least, for all they know, that's all it is. We know better, but anyway, who wants to listen to my claptrap, right?
You know, in some ways the Jedi Council reminds me a bit of the Watcher's Council, in as much as they are overly bound by tradition, and seem too swift to try and break contact with potential problems. I mean, come on! Turfing Willow out of the Jedi Order at such a young age? No wonder the dip shits got stomped by the Sith in the end.
Great line, mate!
But once again, they seem to prove that they aren't best suited for frontline combat duty, at the moment anyway. Ambushed by Gungan's? Not especially awe inspiring. But I suppose if the Gungan's didn't have any particular enmity towards Willow or Tara, it makes it harder to sense them coming in the force. After all, that's why the clones had such an easier time carrying out the Emperor's purge.
One thing I especially liked about this last update was that you seem to be intending to dovetail it into the cannon story nicely, inasmuch as it seems you're going to be showing why, and how, the Gungan's abandoned their cities to move to that temple in the swamp. Nice touch, Sith.

Sorry for not leaving feedback sooner even if I didn't catch your story from the beginning. But once I started reading I got hooked to it. Can't leave proper feedback for now because there are some things I don't get. Just felt bad for never giving any feedback at all. Seen all Starwars films but know nothing about the surroundings. So I have to find some time to read all your statements about the Starwars world.
And I'm really looking forward to all the nice story arcs you are planning to show us. Thanks.
Okay, okay, you pulled my lekku so hard I had to find time to leave some much needed feedback.
I love Star Wars but have never really gotten into the Expanded Universe for a whole bunch of reasons so forgive any ignorance on my part! I have watched all the episodes to death though.
Firstly, Jedi are devilishly tricky characters to write. How did you write a character who is supposed to show no emotion or passion? (Which in my view are the key elements of a great fic!) Quite simply, you write Jedi that do show emotion and passion. Therein lies a whole lot of fun in exploiting their resulting internal conflicts - I'm mean, but I love angst!
The exploration of Willow and Tara's growing relationship within the confines of the Jedi order is fascinating and is definitely far more interesting than the formulaic and badly dialouged relationship between Anakin and Padme.
It's refreshing to read Episide 1 written by someone who can write a realistic relationship. And they have great histories which gives a greater understanding of who they are as Jedi.
here, you should see the fic I'm writing on the side, which I hope to have up by the end of the week. I don't mean to toot my own horn, but I strongly suspect it'll rival some of the other smutty fics here...
)An interesting marrying of Buffy and Star Wars, while it doesnt sound realistic that a Padawan would say 'frilly' - given that it's coming from Padawan Willow, I can!
I'm looking forward to seeing the way their relationship develops and also the way you delve deep and explore and expand the SW canon.
Tara couldn’t help but let out a small chuckle. “And yet you’re about to kiss me again.”
This is a great insight into Tara's inner thoughts. On the one hand she 'feels' that this is inappropriate behavior between a Master Jedi and a Padawan and on the other her feelings for Willow have drove her into the situation she finds herself in. Will she regret her actions? I hope not.
Lead her down what path? Unconditional love for Willow? I feel like it will come to a point where Tara will have to choose between being a Master Jedi or be Willow's one and only. Why? Because the dummy's in the Order frown upon their Jedi's having a personal relationship with anyone. Dilema, dilema. *sigh*![]()
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So Tara is responsible for Willow not being thrown out of the Order. I am very impressed with her. She automatically felt and saw something in Willow, even back then. She stepped up and spoke on Willow's behalf. She vouched for her and agreed to take on the responsibilty of training her. This shows how mature Tara was even at that age.
Your use of dialect in this chapter is very impressive. Master Yoda's dialect as well as the Gungan's was right on the money! Outstanding work!! Mesa very impressed wit dat!! (<----how'd I do?) This just goes to show how much time and effort you put forth, in order to produce fine piece of writing in this chapter. Thank you.
So now Willow and Tara are in the custody of the Gungan's...hmm, could be a good thing. I mean, Nute Gunray has dispatched his army over to that area and it wouldn't be a good idea for the girls to be left alone. This way Willow and Tara can speak with the Gungan's about their current situation...wait, haven't Qui Gon and Obi Wan been there already? Shouldn't the Gungan's have an idea about what might be transpiring?

You know I am pro Willow and Tara, right? Well don't hate me because what I'm about to say, you might not like...here it goes:
Strategy wise - I like the way Nute Gunray is thinking. If I were him, I couldn't afford to believe that the two Jedi's have been taken care of.
Writing wise - you've excelled.![]()
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Gungans! I was hoping this would be the path Willow and Tara took when they got left behind on Naboo, because I always wanted to see the Gungans without every scene being contaminated by the presence of their prize idiot Jar Jar.
I don't know if it's that it's text, or if it's the extent to which you've chosen to give them an accent without making it a caricature, but already I can take them seriously as an alien race.
I'll be interested to read W/T's further interactions with them (which, having the latest chapter in my inbox, I guess I'll be able to pretty soon).
I did not see it coming at all that Tara actually kept Willow in the Order, when otherwise she would have been turfed out - yet in light of what we've seen of her background, it makes sense. Brave and resourceful as she is, she really doesn't come across as the ideal Jedi-in-training. And it adds a new dimension to her relationship with Tara that Tara is the one who allowed her to stay - as much as she considers herself bound to Tara by their first meeting, Tara feels the same way, as Willow as a Jedi is essentially her responsibility - though of course, in a good way, rather than an onerous one.
And Nute's introspective moment was a nice touch - it adds a depth (that was sorely lacking in the film) to him that he's smart enough to realise he's made the wrong choice in associating with the Sith, even though nothing's going catastrophically wrong right at the moment. Sadly, he's also smart enough to see that he's dug his hole, and now he's got to stay in it - it's the Sith or the grave for him.

Emms wrote:Damn....I keep thinking there's going to be an update.....
Emms wrote:I'm just being impatient gal.

Emms wrote:I refuse to answer that on the grounds that I'm holding any further praise hostage until you post an update...
Then you should really go bug Chris, not me. I've already written it. He just needs to beta it.

Darth Pacula wrote:What kind of excuse is that?
The truth. It's not my fault he can't beta my shit fast enough.

Darth Pacula wrote::lol
Irene73 wrote:Enough with the mexican jokes...*continues pushing cart*...
Chicklets...chicklets...tacos...tacos...burrittos anyone!
Irene73 wrote:Oh hush Sith before I break out in a lively mexican rendition of the Disney's theme song to The Little Mermaid. I'll even throw in a sombrero and zarape to boot. O'Ley!
Under thee see, under thee see...vamonos muchachos!
, go check out my other fic, Under The Sea.
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