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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/13/2011)

Postby leos_pride » Sun Nov 13, 2011 9:20 pm

Yay! Update-y goodness!

Oooh things are being put in motion and are about to get interesting, I have a feeling! Damn Donald getting everyone stirred up >:{ but we expected nothing more from him. Can't wait to see what comes of Ripper's appearance.

So many little teaser's in this update. You dropped some very interesting tidbits in this update. I'm curious to learn more about Pura and Astron. That was a very interesting conversation they had. And what in the frilly heck are Spike and Dru up too?

Can't wait to read more!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/13/2011)

Postby Ariel » Sun Nov 13, 2011 10:04 pm

Hey, Allie!

Wow, a gathering of forces . . . dark and light and stone cold killer crazy (Hi Drusilla! :bigwave ) Also, LOVED 'Ripper' making an appearance - very cool although Astron and Pura remain my favorite. Although (no offense Dibs-Mistress :whip) Astron DOES seem like she's not the brightest crayon in the box! Can you say Big Kitten Love? :kitty I love the visualization of the character (see previous post) but hope she sees that there is more to PURA than meets the eye!

Bath time with Tara and Willow. Mmmmmmmmmmmmm. And Tara cherishing being called her girl - :flower That was really sweet and true to life.

So I am totally into this story - love it! :banana :eatme :banana

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/13/2011)

Postby True_Love » Mon Nov 14, 2011 10:17 am

Allie,

Damn missed opportunity. I thought that bath time would lead to more intamacy between the two...and no I'm not talking about that. But then the update just ended with a quick little wrap-up. *pouts* I did like the addition of Ripper and I was totally shocked to see Angelus, Spke, and Dru in there. Wow, so you're throwing vampires in the mix, huh? Could Astron be a little more clueless...sorry AS but hello? Pura's talking about someone VERY close to you. *wink*

Things seem to be moving forward, can't wait to see who will pop up next!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/13/2011)

Postby beautiful_love » Mon Nov 14, 2011 5:35 pm

Ok my sincerest apologies. I don't know how the hell I missed like twenty updates but I did. This is a really great story so far. It's different and it's nice to see that on the board.

I like that you're integrating other characters too: Giles, Spike, Dru, etc. Even if some are a little evil... As well as the addition of some not so familiar characters. *Ahem*

It's progressing very nicely though and I'm looking forward to seeing who else you introduce and how the whole clash between dickhead Donald Maclay and our favorite witches will play out!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/13/2011)

Postby Mgraham93 » Wed Nov 16, 2011 10:27 am

Really enjoyed this chapter Spike and Dru were great so was Ripper

Astron and Pura are fun to read

loved the little bit of Willow/Tara in this chapter especially the "My Girl"

[quote]for a second that the cat-eyes changed. For a moment, they were chocolate brown, human eyes. [/quote ]I Had a feeling it might go with the person trapped in a cats body cool, I wonder how it happened clearly it's up to Astron. Could be funny if Willow ant Tara end up nicknaming Pura Miss Kitty Fantastico

Can't wait for more =)
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/13/2011)

Postby Babbles4Twillow » Mon Nov 21, 2011 6:39 pm

Okay, Kittens, responses and then Update!

Astron - Glad you liked it. I'm not too fond of Dru myself. Pura's surname will come with time.
~whacks Astron upside the head, then rubs my own head~ Ok didn't expect that..

HAHAHA, you're too funny, Bestie!! LMAO

Astron will see in time, all things come with time. Patience bestie, these characters are whispering to me as we speak.

Leo - Thanks for the feedback. I'm wondering the same things you are, it's like I never know whats going to happen. This story keeps changing on me, ripping itself from my plans and creating something entirely different.

Ariel - Thanks so much for your feedback! I'm loving the characters showing up, but I agree with you, out of these, so far, A/P remain my favorite. They will play a pretty big part I think. We'll see. Thanks for sticking with me!

True_Love - quick wrap-up was intended, LOL! I know, I'm a big meanie. Please enjoy this next chapter..well..dont enjoy it, its kinda hard. Also, not vamps, necromancers.

beautiful_love - No apologies needed! Just glad your still with me!

Mgraham93 - Thanks! You're right, it IS up to Astron. Shh, don't tell anyone! Can you imagine a great big magical tiger being nicknamed Miss Kitty? *rolls around laughing*

Thank you so much for your support!
ON TO THE NEXT!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/13/2011)

Postby Babbles4Twillow » Mon Nov 21, 2011 6:44 pm

Summary ~ Tara Maclay escapes her abusive family and finds herself wounded at Rosenburg Castle, home to Willow, a lonely witch who is afraid to love. AU

Distribution ~ I really don't care as long as it gets read. Just ask first.

Rating ~ M for violence and anything that might happen in the future...just a precaution

Disclaimer ~ The characters are not mine and belong to their respective owners. I just play with them. The story, however, is mine.

Feedback ~ ALWAYS WELCOME

Thanks ~ To all the Kittens who gave me GREAT characters and suggestions! Keep an eye out! I can't put them all in one chapter but they will be showing up as the story goes on!

Notes ~ This chapter was a bit hard for me, but I hope its okay. Not much in the plot-line here, just a bonding between our girls. To those of you who read but don't post feedback, please do, it helps, and makes the struggles with the story all worth it. Lurkers, de-lurk! Anyway! Enjoy!

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Chapter 9 - The Now and Then Willow

For the first time, it was not her own nightmares or memories that Tara looked upon. She was standing next to now-Willow, looking upon then-Willow. She looked over to her Willow, her curiosity evident in her eyes. This felt like a dream, she knew her body was laying restfully next to Willow’s, yet she knew; this was not a dream, its had a different air to it, a sense of reality weaving threads through her. She was awake yet sleeping, her mind in another reality, another place. She looked again upon then-Willow, sitting at the dining table, surrounded by others. Only one she recognized, a radiant, smiling, unscarred Buffy, smiling at the young girl sitting next to her.

“I needed to show you,” Willow said, calmly from her side.

“Who are they?” Tara said reverently. They looked so happy, sitting together, laughing and eating together.

“My family,” Willow answered. “You know Buffy. That’s her sister, Dawn.” Tara turned her eyes to the young girl. Beautiful in her youth, she would have been heartbreaking…if, always if.

Her eyes left the girl, shifting to the man next to her. Dark-haired, light skinned, his face lightly wrinkled with laugh-lines. His eyes sparkled in the lighting from the candles and the fire roaring in the big hearth. He turned, bursting into laughter at something then-Willow had said. Tara could not hear the conversation, was cloaked in silence, yet she felt the happiness of that laugh shoot into her heart.

“My brother of my heart,” Willow said softly. “Xander. I’ve known him for as long as I can remember.” Tara ignored the present-tense in that statement, feeling Willow’s need to explain. “He… was always there for me when I needed him, no matter the situation.” Willow’s voice trailed off, remembering. Tara was shocked for a moment to see servants bustle in and out of the room. So she hadn’t always been so alone.

The blonde turned her eyes away from the light that was Xander, landing on the woman sitting next to then-Willow. Hair blonde as sunlight shimmered along her tiny shoulders, framing a face pale in contrast. Her eyebrows arched over piercing violet eyes. Tara once again felt shock as those eyes, a beautiful shade of purple, seemed to look at her. Full rose-red lips quirked, as if to say, “What can we do?” before her eyes turned back to her friends.

“Morgan,” Tara said. “Did she just look at me?”

“Yes. My Morgan. She was always seeing things none of us ever could. That night, I wondered who that smile was for.”

“She seems sad,” Tara whispered. Her heart ached for this family, for the woman she loved, but most of all, for the woman who knew what her end was, and where her own love would be, standing here, years later, showing a new love her past.

“Wouldn’t you be?” Willow retorted, gently.

“Yes,” came the simple reply as Tara took Willow’s hand in her own, gripping tightly. Willow squeezed back and suddenly the room erupted in sound. No longer were they encased in the silence. She looked quizzically to now-Willow.

“There is more, yet,” Willow said, her eyes growing ever more sad, old beyond her years.

The laughter in the room died as a scream rent the air. The group looked up in alarm as they heard the yelling of a crowd from the hall.

“Quick,” Buffy yelled, grabbing Dawn, running towards a tapestry on the wall. She backed up in shock as men came screaming through the door behind the tapestry, wielding weapons. “Run, Dawnie!”

Dawn grabbed her sister’s hand and they ran together back to their family, who were running towards the great doors.

“Weapons,” Xander yelled, as they continued through the doors and out into the hall. He ripped open a chest, throwing weapons to each of them, except the two witches. The crowd around them grew, separating them.

Buffy’s sword began clashing against another as she was backed into a wall, Dawn pushed into the corner behind her. “Buffy,” she screamed.

“I’ll keep you safe, Dawn,” the petite blond promised, slicing down the offender with surprising skill. She had only a moment to breathe before another came at them. Tara’s eyes turned away, towards the door of the library, where then-Willow and Morgan stood, fending off invaders with their magics. They didn’t see the man creep up behind them, the knife glinting in his hand. They didn’t see the wicked grin that Tara saw as she watched her father grab Morgan, whipping her around, held against his chest, the knife at her neck. It’s sharp edge glinted wickedly in the light as then-Willow reeled around, facing them. Now-Willow left her side to stand just beside Morgan, whose violet eyes turned to her tear-filled green.

“I wish it hadn’t been like this,” Willow whispered.

“It has to be, you’ll see,” Morgan answered, startling both Willows.

Donald smiled at then-Willow, “It will never be.” With that, he drew the blade across the thin skin of her neck, thin droplets of blood dripping down into her bodice. Both Willows started forward, as if to stop him, but he stopped them with a quick movement, ripping Morgan’s head violently back, slicing her neck fully this time, deeply, exposing her flesh. He laughed, maniacally, as then-Willow dropped to her knees, wailing out her loss. Now-Willow stared at those violet eyes, dead as they were, before returning to Tara’s side, “It’s not over.”

Tara turned away form the scene in front of her, to see Xander trying valiantly to fight off three men, swinging an axe around with little skill.

“He never was a fighter,” Willow said, softly, as she noticed that he kept turning his head to watch her carefully, trying to keep the men away from her. In her grief, she had been oblivious to the fight around her. Men were cut down, others ran, but yet, as it seemed as if they would finally leave them to grieve the loss of Morgan, Xander was caught off guard, two swords piercing his gut. Both Willow and Tara turned from this, not wanting to see the horror. Buffy was still fighting in the corner, but she was obviously growing tired. The man in front of her swung wild, his sword catching her by surprise, slicing her face open from hair-line to jaw, the force of it knocking her down. Tara closed her eyes tight as she saw the man turn his eyes toward the younger girl. Hearing the scream that came next was bad enough, she didn’t want to see it. Suddenly, they were again enfolded in silence, the screams of the servants and Willow’s dying friends removed. Tara opened her eyes warily, relieved when she saw nothing but the view from the ramparts. Stars twinkled in the sky.

“I’m sorry for having you see that,” Willow said remorsefully, turning from Tara to walk to the edge, looking out over her land, looking up to stare at the night sky.

Tara walked to her quietly, laying a gentle hand on Willow’s trembling shoulder, “It’s okay, baby. I needed that. To see your pain as you saw mine. I know there is more, for both of us, but we need to share it, as best we can, in order to understand each other.”

Willow sighed and turned her sea-green eyes to gaze upon her love. “It hurts so much, baby. I miss them.”

“I know,” Tara answered, tears falling freely. She turned, looking into the sky, “And now I understand.” She took a deep breath, then threw her hand out towards the sky, sending a cascading torrent of fire from her fingertips, the flames bursting in the night with their shared pain.

“No longer alone,” Willow said. “Never again.” She threw lightning into the sky, joining Tara’s fire. For a moment, they simply just threw bursts of pain up into the air, releasing the horror of their pasts. The fire from Tara grew hot, she could feel its need, along with her own. She turned towards her love, grasping her free hand with her own.

“Together,” Tara whispered, and they turned as one, letting out a stream of lightning, fire dancing and riding along the line of shattering blue electricity. It streamed endlessly from their fingertips, out into the night, the fire riding the lightning as their pain and their souls melded together to become one.


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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/13/2011)

Postby AstronSoul » Mon Nov 21, 2011 6:44 pm

DIBS MUAHAHAHAHA!!!


Tara once again felt shock as those eyes, a beautiful shade of purple, seemed to look at her. Full rose-red lips quirked, as if to say, “What can we do?” before her eyes turned back to her friends.

“Morgan,” Tara said. “Did she just look at me?”

“Yes. My Morgan. She was always seeing things none of us ever could. That night, I wondered who that smile was for.”


Now that is awesome, that Morgan saw her and knew what would happen (even tho lots of sadness) It shows that she was prepared for what came and knew Willow would have the love she needed.

“He never was a fighter,” Willow said, softly, as she noticed that he kept turning his head to watch her carefully, trying to keep the men away from her. In her grief, she had been oblivious to the fight around her. Men were cut down, others ran, but yet, as it seemed as if they would finally leave them to grieve the loss of Morgan, Xander was caught off guard, two swords piercing his gut. Both Willow and Tara turned from this, not wanting to see the horror. Buffy was still fighting in the corner, but she was obviously growing tired. The man in front of her swung wild, his sword catching her by surprise, slicing her face open from hair-line to jaw, the force of it knocking her down. Tara closed her eyes tight as she saw the man turn his eyes toward the younger girl. Hearing the scream that came next was bad enough, she didn’t want to see it. Suddenly, they were again enfolded in silence, the screams of the servants and Willow’s dying friends removed. Tara opened her eyes warily, relieved when she saw nothing but the view from the ramparts. Stars twinkled in the sky.


Even though they couldn't watch it was good to hear, to understand each other better, I wouldn't have been able to watch myself.

“I know,” Tara answered, tears falling freely. She turned, looking into the sky, “And now I understand.” She took a deep breath, then threw her hand out towards the sky, sending a cascading torrent of fire from her fingertips, the flames bursting in the night with their shared pain.


Showing that she understands to Willow I think is key because it makes their connection stronger.

“Together,” Tara whispered, and they turned as one, letting out a stream of lighting, fire dancing and riding along the line of shattering blue electricity. It streamed endlessly from their fingertips, out into the night, the fire riding the lighting as their pain and their souls melded together to become one.


I can see this in my head, and it looks awesome!!!! (Might even see if my guy can draw it )

Great update bestie can't wait for more!!!

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby beautiful_love » Mon Nov 21, 2011 7:07 pm

Great update! Very well written and I can imagine, very hard to write. I was wondering If the others would show up. Sad how they did come into the story but so much emotion behind it. No wonder Willow's so incredibly hurt. She didn't just lose Morgan. She lost her whole family. I like how Morgan saw Tara coming all along though and you showed us when she first had the vision. Great job. Can't wait for more.
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby Grimm » Mon Nov 21, 2011 9:12 pm

That was heartbreakingly beautiful :(( . I was very curious about what happend to the others. To say that I was shocked :o at the brutality of that dreadful troll, Donald Maclay, would be an understatement.

I really hope you let Ripper loose on his ass before it's all said and done :angry !

I regularly read your story and I will do a better job of leaving feeback....Great update!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby True_Love » Mon Nov 21, 2011 10:39 pm

Great update Allie!

Wow if that was half as hard to write as it was to read then I tip my hat to you. You painted an extremely vivid and detailed picture of the haunting memory of the night that changed Willow's life forever. Like Jess said, I was wondering if the others were going to make it in the story, it's just sad to see how they did.

Sharing each others pain is not going to be an easy process, especially with the two visions you've already shown us. Hopefully, as the pain is shared it will be released and strength will grow in its place.

Looking forward to you next update.
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby Ariel » Tue Nov 22, 2011 1:09 am

Allie,

This was so beautifully written, it brought tears to my eyes.

It was poetry. It was imaginative. To analyze the writing almost seems wrong; it seems somehow ancient and beautiful and you don't analyze the ancient mysteries you simply stand in awe.

I'm sorry. You've written detailed, wonderful feedback to me but I feel so moved by this that I honestly don't know what to say except to thank you with all my heart for writing it.

You deserve good feedback; I'll wait a while and re-read and re-edit. But for now, it's tears and silence and gratitude for your gift.

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby JustSkipIt » Wed Nov 23, 2011 7:20 am

brutal. Well done. You write with great passion.both love and violence. I am eager for more.
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby Finey_McFine » Thu Nov 24, 2011 5:18 pm

Hey Allie!

Wow, that was some really powerful writing and quite painful to read. The visual was great and it truly 'felt' like a vision; I could picture it all, even though I didn't really want to. What he did to them was horrific and he deserves everything that's coming to him. I like the way you are weaving the past with the present and the end was most definitely fitting.

Definitely looking forward to your next update!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby DaddyCatALSO » Sat Nov 26, 2011 1:49 pm

Really a wonderful and solid way to establish the background firmly. I too can see the troubles in getting this written.
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby Babbles4Twillow » Sat Nov 26, 2011 10:41 pm

Hello kittens. Just wanted to let you know that I am ill and away from home. Actually on a cell right now. Anywayz. Won't be able to provide an update this weekend. Hopefully I will have it posted by friday. Forgive me?

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby leos_pride » Sat Nov 26, 2011 11:02 pm

Oh no! :-(

Hope you are feeling better soon! We will (im)patiently wait for the next update until you are feeling better. :P

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby AstronSoul » Sat Nov 26, 2011 11:08 pm

Don't worry bestie, we are patient-ish and we hope you get better soon!!!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby Wills redemption » Sun Nov 27, 2011 6:41 am

Hey there,

after having delurked just last weekend I still have to comment on this gem of a story which I enjoyed from the start (until now silently). I really love this "fairytale feeling" it has. As some readers commented before it reminded me of "Beauty and the Beast" in the beginning and sometimes I still get this feeling (I was somehow expecting evil Donald starting to sing like Gaston in the Disney movie as he stood on this crate agitating the townspeople - if you think I'm weird now you're probably right :) ). But the comparison doesn't do your story justice because yours is much deeper, with Astron and Pura, Ripper and the creepy necromancers also now added into the conflict Donald + townspeople against our beloved girls from the castle. I wonder if Ripper (= Giles) is an old acquaintance of Willow and Buffy?

The last chapter was absolutely heartbreaking, powerfully written, so :bow . Also nice explanation of the title (Taras magical fire riding Willows lightning)!

But it made me wonder: how did Willow and Buffy survive? It might be possible that the attackers believed Buffy was dead or dying after she went down from this head blow and just left her there to die, but as far as we know Willow wasn't injured in the attack. Why did Donald the scumbag let her live when the prophecy obviously refered to her? I'm glad of course hat he did, but it keeps me wondering. Maybe Willow snapped out of the stupor she fell in after Morgans death in time to save herself and Buffy (leaving her with the self remorse that she didn't try to save Xander and Dawn)? Hopefully this mystery will be solved in the course of the story.

Now I just hope that the involvement of the evil necromancers won't mean that we'll have to see Morgan, Xander and the rest of Willows family as zombies in the future...

I'm really looking forward to the next update and which other witches/heroes will come to assist our girls. I'm really hoping one of them will be Buffys soulmate, it's sad that she is still alone while Willow and Tara have found each other.
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby vampyregurl73 » Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:44 am

Allie,

Very nice. This interlude, Willow finally laying bare what happened to Tara, was very moving. Makes it very understandable that it would be hard to write all this.

The appearance of "Ripper" you set up in a great ominous way, but his remarks makes me think more friend than foe...

With the bile that Tara's father is spewing, it's apparently the girls are going to need as many friends as they can get because the outcome just isn't going to be pretty.

Good show!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby Mgraham93 » Mon Nov 28, 2011 8:47 am

It was a very emotional chapter but also necessary for the backstory. In fact all these chapters have really helped to firmly establish how evil Donald Maclay truly is. Especially now as Willow Tara and Buffy have very personal reasons to fight him.
The ending really showed their strength. Stood on the castle walls sending their magic into the sky as a sign of their love and a symbol for all those who oppose evil and cruelty. it was beautiful.
With every chapter the excitement for the future increases, they're in the calm before the storm now but it can't last forever. I really look forward to the eventual cronfrontation. I do wonder though if people start gathering at the castle how long will they be able to stay, as there's only been two people living in the castle for several years they wouldn't need that much food, but if an army is forming they may not have the supplies for very long.
Also I missed it the first time reading but I liked the title drop at the ending.

P.S I found out that there are several real Castle Roseenburgs around Europe which is all kinds of awesome
Matty- Lovers Dearest, Falling in love at christmas A trip through time thinking about the verse

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby Babbles4Twillow » Tue Dec 06, 2011 5:11 pm

Replies and then on to the update! Not quoting again, lol. Its been a long day.

Astron - Congrats, yet again, on dibs! Yes, Morgan knew what was coming. It's hard for me to get in Morgan's head. I wouldn't have been able to watch either...which stinks that it was inside my head, cause well, can't close my eyes aganst it if its in my head.

beautiful_love - Thanks for the feedback! I feel Willow's pain greatly when writing things like this. It's so sad that she lost everyone but Buffy.

Grimm - Love the new name! So much easier lol. Heartbreakingly beautiful, huh? Thanks so much!! Dreadful troll, lmao...great stuff Sonya!

True_Love - *giggles* hat tipping! Thanks! I see a great future for these two women. They share with each other so easily.

Ariel - Like I PM'd you, your feedback was amazing. I bragged about this specific post to everyone I know because it made me feel so proud. Thank you so much for that. Thanks also for Charna! Here she comes!

JustSkipIt - Thanks! More coming!

Finey_McFine - Thanks for the feedback! I agree, Donald fully deserves what he's gonna get, but it will be a while before he gets it. Unfortunately!

DaddyCatALSO - Thanks!!!!

Wills redemption - Congrats on the de-lurk, and thanks for posting here. Welcome to the wonderful world of KB! Whats funny is I don't think you're weird at all. I was watching Beauty and the Beast with my God-daughter while I was sick, and I totally pictured that too, Donald singing like Gaston from the soapbox! This Giles actually doesn't know the girls..yet. As for your question as to how Willow and Buffy survived, Donald is evil. He left Willow there to suffer, such a stupid mistake. And yes, Buffy was left for dead. Zombie scoobs...NOT gonna go there *shudder*. Buffy's time will come. No worries. Thanks for reading!

vampyregurl73 - Ripper does not like Donald at ALL. He's going to be a big help, methinks. The girls are going to need as much help as possible, which is why we've got more friends on their way! Check out River!

Mgraham93 - The calm will not last forever, you're right. With this chapter comes new friends, who will get them ready. Glad you liked the title drop! Is there really several Castle Rosenbergs? I'll have to look that up! Thanks!

Thanks for all the lovely feedback everyone!
ON TO THE NEXT!!!!
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby Babbles4Twillow » Tue Dec 06, 2011 5:31 pm

Summary ~ Tara Maclay escapes her abusive family and finds herself wounded at Rosenburg Castle, home to Willow, a lonely witch who is afraid to love. AU

Distribution ~ I really don't care as long as it gets read. Just ask first.

Rating ~ M for violence and anything that might happen in the future...just a precaution

Disclaimer ~ The characters are not mine and belong to their respective owners. I just play with them. The story, however, is mine.

Feedback ~ ALWAYS WELCOME

Thanks - To my wonderful Bestie and Beta - Astronsoul! :flower

Special thanks - to Ariel and Vampyregurl73 - Your characters show up in this chapter. Others who have sent me characters, they will show up soon!

Notes ~ So sorry its been so long! R/L caught up with me in the form of getting extremely sick and then welcoming a god-son into the world! I'm so happy right now!! So happy that I couldn't put much evil bad-ness in here. Enjoy!

Thoughts and Cat-speak in italics

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Chapter 10 - The Winds of Change


While two women slept in each others arms, sharing a memory through their dreams, two figures made their way towards the castle. The moonlight shone down on the forest, casting a dim glow in the night. Tops of trees reached over like canopies, grasping each other and protecting the forest’s inhabitants like mother hens, giving hiding places to both the large and small animals. Birds called lonely songs, echoing each other, finding comfort in numbers. The restlessness of the forest was called out by the animals in the place that was never truly sleeping.

Astron and Pura tread through the forest, the dark of night cloaking their movements; Astron’s shoulders slumped with exhaustion, her footsteps heavy. She didn’t know how long she had been walking; they had only stopped to rest a few times, stopping only once for sleep. There was an urgency deep inside her, pushing her limits; she knew there was something happening, something big, and someone out there needed her help. The one time she had slept on this journey, a woman had come to her in her dreams, speaking of her daughter, a sad gleam in her eyes. The woman said her daughter had never known a true friend, who would need Astron to stand as that friend now in her biggest time of need. The tear that slipped down the blonde woman’s beautiful face spurred Astron into wakefulness and urged her to forget the cold, forget her aching body, to keep moving, pushing her to trek though the forest with fervor. Through all of this, Pura padded along silently, feeling her friend’s need to keep moving.

You need to rest, Pura said finally.

“I’ll rest when I-” Astron’s statement was cut off by her cry of pain. She fell to her knees, hands clutched at her chest.

Astron! Pura called out. She rushed to her friend’s side, nudging her with her nose.

“We’re close,” Astron gasped out.

Your walls, put back up your walls!

“There’s so much pain, Pura. Grief like no other,” Astron cried, tears streaming from her eyes. “But something else is there, something warm.”

Pura shook her great head, Build them back up, Astron. Focus. She looked closely at her friend. Would she be able to feel what came from her own familiar’s heart? Pura shook her head again. There was too much bombarding Astron in her moment of exhaustion for her to look too closely at the friend she thought she knew everything about.

Astron closed her eyes tight, imagining building a wall, stone by stone, the feelings receding with each stone.

You must sleep, Pura told her. You can’t keep up your walls if you’re this tired.

Astron nodded, laying down. Pura lay by her head, letting Astron cuddle her head into her side.

Sleep, my love, Pura thought, laying a tiger’s kiss upon the sleeping figures head, her yellow cat eyes shifting into human eyes, large, chocolate-brown, doe eyes. Her heart ached for the woman with so much on her shoulders. Astron had left home at a young age, determined to change her circumstances, determined not to be the weak woman her parents wanted her to be. On her own, Astron had become the woman that the young girl had dreamed about, a strong woman who could defend herself, whether it be with magic or with her own skills as a fighter. Yet, in her ferocity to become trained, Astron had forgotten to let herself love. The dark-haired woman didn’t let very many people in, trusted few with her emotions.

Pura understood, she had watched from afar long enough to know how Astron was. When she had first come to Astron, she had been afraid. Shape-shifters from her tribe did not show themselves to magic-users, and they only showed their true selves once they had found their mate. The tiger looked down at Astron, knowing something had to happen soon. She wanted Astron to know what she really looked like, she wanted to walk on two feet again.

The tiger let herself calm, taking in her surroundings. The trees were thinner then they had been, the undergrowth not as thick. Astron had been right, they were getting close. Close to where, Pura did not know. When her friend woke, she would scout ahead to see what they were walking into. She shifted her great body slightly, curling to wrap protectively around her love before drifting off into sleep.

Astron lifted her head as the breathing of the cat underneath her head calmed. My love? she thought. Had she dreamed it, or had Pura really said that? She noticed the way the tiger had curled around her protectively and felt her heart rate increase. Was it possible that Pura loved her? Astron knew she had feelings for her friend, something she thought would never be returned. A human and a tiger…how did that even work? She shook her head and chuckled, Does it matter? I love her.

Astron’s face broke into a wide grin as she admitted out loud what she had just barely allowed herself to see, “I love her.”

She rested her head, once again, on the cat’s side, falling into a more peaceful sleep now that she had admitted to herself something she had been fighting for so long.

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Tara woke from the memory-dream with a gasp of pain. Sometime during the night, Willow had wrapped her leg around Tara’s broken one. The redhead’s leg wrapped around the splint tightly. Willow moaned in her sleep, her leg clenching tighter; he blonde bit back another gasp at the pain that ran like fire through her leg. Turning her head, she saw Willow’s furrowed brow. Something was now happening in Willow’s dream that she didn’t like and it was clearly upsetting the redhead. Tara ran a soothing hand along the red silk of Willow’s hair. She forgot about the pain in her leg as green eyes blinked open, staring owlishly at her with sleepy eyes.

“You left me,” Willow said slowly.

“I’m right here,” Tara answered. “I just woke up, that’s all.”

Blinking the sleep from her eyes, Willow stretched, freezing when Tara gasped again in pain. “I’m sorry,” Willow cried out, carefully unwrapping her leg.

“It’s okay darling,” Tara said, trying to comfort the upset redhead. “Will you meditate with me? It gets better when we meditate.”

“Of course,” Willow said, sitting up eagerly and situating herself for meditation. Tara sat up and fluffed some pillows behind her back. If this went right, she could heal herself completely. Taking a deep breath, she took Willow’s hands and both women allowed their magic to flow. After their magic had joined and recycled through each other a few times, gathering strength, the witches pushed their power into the earth, pulling new power back to join with their now-fresh magic. They did this recycling for at least an hour, calming themselves.

The peaceful repetition was a welcome change from the events of the night before. While the dream still lingered in the back of their minds, now they only focused on the feelings they had for each other, focused only on joining their power with the earth.

“Ready?” Tara sighed out.

“Yes. Focus on your leg. Push the power there, we can do this,” Willow replied.

The witches felt their love for each other bloom within themselves, focusing their joined power on Tara’s broken leg. Tara breathed a sigh of wonder when she felt Willow’s love focus in her leg. She felt like she was glowing from within, but a slight opening of her eyes revealed that she was not glowing and neither was Willow. The blonde gave a small smile and refocused herself. There was a pinch in her leg as the bone started knitting itself back together, the love inside them blocking out the pain it would have caused. Warmth flooded through her as the flesh around the bone healed, leaving no inflammation.

Opening her eyes in wonder, she saw Willow staring back at her, wide grin and sweaty forehead matching her own. There was a silent communication and they closed their eyes once again, giving the earth back its power, once again recycling their own, calming themselves as they reached out to touch the life in the surrounding area. The forest was busy with life, making the women realize that by this time, it was mid-day. They had been meditating for hours. Tara felt Willow pull from the meditation, and almost pulled away herself when she felt a life-force enter her “field of vision”. A large animal, yet not an animal, with a beautiful aura, running at full speed. Tara smiled, then her brow furrowed in confusion as another force entered, a human, both forces headed towards the castle. Yet the human wasn’t hunting the animal. Tara pulled out of the meditation and turned to Willow, “We have company.”

“Is he back?” Willow said angrily.

“No. Someone else, or …some thing…I don’t understand,” Tara answered. “It’s moving towards the castle, should be within sight by now.” She tested her leg and found it fully healed, so she took off the splint and stood up carefully. Tara grinned back at Willow, “I can walk now.” They quickly changed clothes and washed from the basin of hot water that Buffy must have left during their meditation.

“Well, let’s go see,” Willow quipped, taking Tara’s hand and walking with her from the room. When Willow went to throw open the door, Tara caught her hand.

“Carefully,” Tara warned. “We don’t know if its friend or foe.”

Willow nodded and slowly opened the door, stepping outside quietly, Tara beside her. They scanned the forest’s edge, waiting. Willow jumped back when a great white tiger stepped from the line of trees, walking slowly towards the gates. The animal was larger than any “cat” either of the women had ever seen. It walked to the edge of the gates, standing just outside of the open area as if waiting for permission to enter.

“Whoa,” Willow said. “He’s a big kitty.”

“I think he is a she,” Tara said, craning her neck for a better view.

“Well. Hello, Ms. Kitty,” Willow called out to the animal. The redhead turned to Tara, “Wonder what she wants. Should we go…um…say hi?”

“How do we say hi to a tiger?” Tara asked incredulously.

“Hi,” Willow demonstrated, waving her arm. Tara laughed.

“You aren’t worried she’ll eat us?”

Willow looked back over to the tiger, who was watching the exchange quietly. “Don’t you think if she wanted to attack she would’ve by now?”

“I suppose,” Tara said uneasily, then laughed as they started walking towards the big cat slowly, showing they meant no harm. “You’re afraid of horses…yet this big tiger with huge teeth doesn’t scare you. You’re an enigma.”

“Sometimes, even I cannot explain the way my mind works,” Willow replied, shaking her head. As they neared the animal, Willow grasped Tara’s hand tighter and called out, “We aren’t going to hurt you.”

“I’m more worried about her hurting us Willow,” Tara said. As she said it, the tiger, crossed over the “threshold” of the gates and laid down.

“Maybe that’s her way of saying she won’t hurt us either,” Willow said. She looked back at the cat, “Is there something you want from us?”

In reply, the cat turned its head back towards the forest. The witches followed its gaze to see a woman walk confidently out of the woods. They watched warily as she walked close then stopped by the cat.

“Hello,” she said. “I’m Astron. This here is my friend Pura. We’re here to help.”

“Help? With what?” Tara asked.

Astron shrugged, “Dunno. Just know you ladies are going to need help. Something’s coming. Something big.”

Willow nodded, “I’m Willow. I own this castle. You are welcome.” She turned towards Tara, waiting.

“I’m T-tara, W-willow’s p-p-partner,” Tara said, silently cursing herself for her stutter. She was taught never to introduce herself, to just stay in the background and out of the way. So many things are changing, she thought.

Astron smiled softly at Tara, “Well, thank you for the welcome.” She looked up at the castle. “Big place for just you guys. Any chance I can get a bath?”

Tara laughed, grateful that the new woman didn’t comment on her stutter, “We’ll g-get you a bath. H-how did you m-meet Pura?”

Willow watched Tara walk away with the new woman as they began talking, trusting Tara to get the woman accommodated. The redhead looked down at the cat who still hadn’t moved, “Now what do I do with you?”

Nothing, Willow heard in her head.

“Well, you’re much more than you seem aren’t you?”

As are you, Pura replied, standing up and walking with Willow back to the castle. Willow kept glancing back at the cat, curiously. Finally, Pura said, What is it?

“Um, can I pet you, or is that like, an insult? Cause you know, I don’t want to be all insult-y gal. Definitely not. Cause you’re like all big and pretty and kinda scary and I really don’t want to insult you. Not that I think you would hurt me, because I get this feeling you wouldn’t. You sure seem like a nice cat, but I mean, you’re like my guest and insulting guests is rude, and oh, will someone please shut me up?”

Pura chuckled, feeling a new liking for this woman in her chest. The redhead sure was strange. How do you say all that without breathing?

“It’s a talent, a well exercised talent,” Willow dead panned.

You can, what did you call it? Pet me, if you like, Pura said, pushing her head into Willow’s hand.

“Soft, I like soft,” Willow said in wonder. “I’m petting a tiger! Hey Tara,” she called out, “I’m petting a tiger!”

The new guests burst into laughter and soon the two witches joined them.

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Many miles away, a woman walked through her destroyed home. She had returned from her training to find her small village destroyed. Bodies were being gathered by the few survivors, placed into the charnel house until they could be buried.

“What happened here?” She demanded of a survivor.

“A group came, branding weapons, talking of cleaning the earth of witches, they…they killed almost everyone. Kelly, when did you-”

“That is no longer my name,” she answered, looking back at the charnel house that held her family. She turned away from the woman to the open door, staring down at the corpses. “I am Charna. I will seek vengeance for this.” She looked down at the body of her younger sister, “You will be avenged, I promise this, sister.”

“Charna is for death,” the survivor told her.

“Exactly,” she answered, a fire blazing in her eyes. Suddenly, there was a strong wind, blowing Charna’s short black hair around her face. “Tell me, who did this.”

“We do not know his name, the leader, but there was talk of a battle. They are gathering forces to fight the witches.”

“Who is on the other side of this battle?” Charna demanded.

The small man was about the answer but was interrupted by an old woman who came to Charna’s side.

“I have been waiting for you,” the old woman said, her voice full of wisdom.

“Seer,” Charna acknowledged.

“You must go to Rosenberg castle. They are preparing for battle as well. Gather as many witches as you can along the way. This goes deeper than a group of scared little boys, there’s evil out there that seek to aid him.”

“Him?” Charna asked.

“The man who leads the group, Donald Maclay. He has no idea what he has started.”

“Donald Maclay,” Charna repeated. She nodded sharply, gave her thanks, and prepared a horse for her travel.

Just as she was about to climb up, a hand landed on her shoulder. Turning to look, she saw a tall woman with short, curly red hair, grey eyes staring into hers with anger. “River, what-”

“Take me with you,” River answered.

Charna was about to argue when she remembered what the seer had said. She looked carefully at the woman, “Are you sure you’re ready?”

“Oh, I am ready,” she said, lifting a vial of water from around her neck. “I’ve been practicing while you were away. I can help,” River insisted, pulling a card from her pocket.

Charna glanced down at the card, “This came up in your reading?”

“Yes,” River answered.

“You still carry your deck with you everywhere?”

River grinned, “Sure do!”

Charna sighed, “Get ready then, we leave in an hour.”

River nodded and tucked the card back into her pocket, rushing away to prepare herself. Things were changing, the cards told her. Her life was taking a turn. The card that she took from her pocket told her she was ready. The Chariot.

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TBC
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 11/21/2011)

Postby AstronSoul » Tue Dec 06, 2011 5:31 pm

DIBS!

Here we go....

You need to rest, Pura said finally.

“I’ll rest when I-” Astron’s statement was cut off by her cry of pain. She fell to her knees, hands clutched at her chest.

Astron! Pura called out. She rushed to her friend’s side, nudging her with her nose.

“We’re close,” Astron gasped out.

Your walls, put back up your walls!

“There’s so much pain, Pura. Grief like no other,” Astron cried, tears streaming from her eyes. “But something else is there, something warm.”


heh ok you got me pegged if I have something to do I do it, not worrying about sleep...and this has happened to me...very painful. At least Pura is there looking out for her.

Sleep, my love, Pura thought, laying a tiger’s kiss upon the sleeping figures head, her yellow cat eyes shifting into human eyes, large, chocolate-brown, doe eyes. Her heart ached for the woman with so much on her shoulders.


Oh oh it starts!!!


A human and a tiger…how did that even work? She shook her head and chuckled, Does it matter? I love her.


That is a good question....lol

Astron’s face broke into a wide grin as she admitted out loud what she had just barely allowed herself to see, “I love her.”


Finally Astron pulls her head out of her ass, she see's light!!!!

Tara pulled out of the meditation and turned to Willow, “We have company.”


That alone sounds iffy until you read on lol

“Is he back?” Willow said angrily.

“No. Someone else, or …some thing…I don’t understand,” Tara answered. “It’s moving towards the castle, should be within sight by now.” She tested her leg and found it fully healed, so she took off the splint and stood up carefully. Tara grinned back at Willow, “I can walk now.” They quickly changed clothes and washed from the basin of hot water that Buffy must have left during their meditation.


yay new visitors!!!

“Whoa,” Willow said. “He’s a big kitty.”

“I think he is a she,” Tara said, craning her neck for a better view.

“Well. Hello, Ms. Kitty,” Willow called out to the animal. The redhead turned to Tara, “Wonder what she wants. Should we go…um…say hi?”

“How do we say hi to a tiger?” Tara asked incredulously.

“Hi,” Willow demonstrated, waving her arm. Tara laughed.


LOL I love how Tara looks to make sure :lmao :lmao

“I suppose,” Tara said uneasily, then laughed as they started walking towards the big cat slowly, showing they meant no harm. “You’re afraid of horses…yet this big tiger with huge teeth doesn’t scare you. You’re an enigma.”


Sometimes I think we can't grasp how much of an Enigma Willow is.

“Maybe that’s her way of saying she won’t hurt us either,” Willow said. She looked back at the cat, “Is there something you want from us?”

In reply, the cat turned its head back towards the forest. The witches followed its gaze to see a woman walk confidently out of the woods. They watched warily as she walked close then stopped by the cat.


I was shocked you weren't very detailed here, but it still shows how the woman would walk meeting strangers, freakin head on! lol

“Hello,” she said. “I’m Astron. This here is my friend Pura. We’re here to help.”

“Help? With what?” Tara asked.

Astron shrugged, “Dunno. Just know you ladies are going to need help. Something’s coming. Something big.”

Willow nodded, “I’m Willow. I own this castle. You are welcome.” She turned towards Tara, waiting.


Confident and quick to answer hell yeah.

Willow watched Tara walk away with the new woman as they began talking, trusting Tara to get the woman accommodated. The redhead looked down at the cat who still hadn’t moved, “Now what do I do with you?”

Nothing, Willow heard in her head.

“Well, you’re much more than you seem aren’t you?”

As are you, Pura replied,


hehe people are always full of surprises

“Soft, I like soft,” Willow said in wonder. “I’m petting a tiger! Hey Tara,” she called out, “I’m petting a tiger!”

The new guests burst into laughter and soon the two witches joined them.


and I introduce to you, KID WILLOW!!! lol so damn adorable

Charna glanced down at the card, “This came up in your reading?”

“Yes,” River answered.

“You still carry your deck with you everywhere?”

River grinned, “Sure do!”

Charna sighed, “Get ready then, we leave in an hour.”

River nodded and tucked the card back into her pocket, rushing away to prepare herself. Things were changing, the cards told her. Her life was taking a turn. The card that she took from her pocket told her she was ready. The Chariot.


Yay new peeps, just have to remind myself their histories and things will be revealed in time (that's how a story works people) so I can't wait to learn more about these two.

Great job!!!

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 12/06/2011)

Postby True_Love » Tue Dec 06, 2011 6:58 pm

Allie,

YAY! Tara's leg has finally healed. That took a lot longer than I expected it would. Now she and Willow can really start preparing for battle and it looks like they already are going to have quite a few visitors.

I was wondering, maybe it's just me (and if it is, ignore my comment), but do you think when you add new character with different gifts/abilities you could explain a little more about what they are exactly? I keep finding myself confused by what special talents the new characters have and if there is a name for what they are. Maybe even a little history as an intro. I really want to follow what you are writing about, but keep feeling like I'm lost in a game of D&D with no game playing history or experience, lol.

I really do love your storytelling, it has some really great qualities to it! I look forward to reading more, even if my age causes me to miss the boat a little bit.
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 12/06/2011)

Postby leos_pride » Tue Dec 06, 2011 7:11 pm

Whoo hoo update!

What a great update! I'm glad to see Astron and Pura have arrived at the castle. And I'm very interested to see what transpires between them now that Astron has admitted her feelings. What a pleasant surprise for her when she discovers Pura's true nature.

I'm so glad Tara is up and moving around now. That's so great they were finally able to heal her leg. That will definitely make things easier for everyone :) Definitely curious to see more of our newest characters.

Great update! Can't wait to see what happens next :D

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 12/06/2011)

Postby Babbles4Twillow » Tue Dec 06, 2011 7:13 pm

Lexi - sorry about that. They are just witches with special abilities that get explained more as the story progresses. No d&d here lol
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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 12/06/2011)

Postby Ariel » Thu Dec 08, 2011 10:28 am

Hey, Allie!

Wow, lotsa stuff goin’ on, girlfriend! Loved Astron and Pura’s journey and this part:
“I’ll rest when I-” Astron’s statement was cut off by her cry of pain. She fell to her knees, hands clutched at her chest.

Astron! Pura called out. She rushed to her friend’s side, nudging her with her nose.

“We’re close,” Astron gasped out.

Your walls, put back up your walls!
Love the idea of mystical barriers and how Astron has to focus and visualize to build up her walls! I look forward to more discussion of magic and how it works! (I love that stuff!)

Astron and Pura are just purrrrrrrrrrfect! Okay, dramatically bad pun! I’m sorry! See, I’m punishing myself! :grin :whip Seriously, I LOVE Pura. My only regret is that she just has to go *pouf *to be human.- it seems too easy. But I LOVED Pura saying, “my love” and Astron drifting off and realizing that she loved Pura, too. And no, I am not a proponent of inter-species dating! *huffs* But that was awfully sweet! :love :flower :love

“Whoa,” Willow said. “He’s a big kitty.”
I like a lot about this whole scene. First, Willow getting Pura’s gender wrong (not always easy to get a view when the critter is coming towards you) and the quirkiness of Willow’s fears. Fear is like that – crazy and irrational and fun to write.

“Well, you’re much more than you seem aren’t you?”

As are you, Pura replied, standing up and walking with Willow back to the castle. Willow kept glancing back at the cat, curiously. Finally, Pura said, What is it?

“Um, can I pet you, or is that like, an insult? Cause you know, I don’t want to be all insult-y gal. Definitely not. Cause you’re like all big and pretty and kinda scary and I really don’t want to insult you. Not that I think you would hurt me, because I get this feeling you wouldn’t. You sure seem like a nice cat, but I mean, you’re like my guest and insulting guests is rude, and oh, will someone please shut me up?”

Pura chuckled, feeling a new liking for this woman in her chest. The redhead sure was strange. How do you say all that without breathing?

“It’s a talent, a well exercised talent,” Willow dead panned.

You can, what did you call it? Pet me, if you like, Pura said, pushing her head into Willow’s hand.
OMG! I loved this! It was funny and sweet and yes *blinks in stunned surprise* I have a crush on a tiger! :blush AND I’m sick of AstronSoul getting everything! (sibling rivalry, much?) She got Pura AND dibs on your story! I hung around, finger on the key, but left FOR A MOMENT and BAM the Dibs-Mistress of the Universe struck again! So, I am officially calling your bestie out to settle this in a mature, dignified fashion – either squid cannons, water balloons, or peanut butter at two paces! I assume you’re acting as her second in this affair of Honor? Just don’t damage your typing fingers! Oh-Kay, craziness slowly subsiding . . . . *whew*!

Just as she was about to climb up, a hand landed on her shoulder. Turning to look, she saw a tall woman with short, curly red hair, grey eyes staring into hers with anger. “River, what-”

“Take me with you,” River answered.

Charna was about to argue when she remembered what the seer had said. She looked carefully at the woman, “Are you sure you’re ready?”

“Oh, I am ready,” she said, lifting a vial of water from around her neck. “I’ve been practicing while you were away. I can help,” River insisted, pulling a card from her pocket.


Enjoyed the introduction of Charna and River and liked how they interact. A relationship with two different types who obviously have a little history is intriguing. As for the Tarot card, the Chariot, lovely touch!

Some great characters, lots of plot threads, thinking of the Norns here – great magick-y bits so Wow, keep writing! I am totally into this! :kgeek :kgeek :kgeek

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 12/06/2011)

Postby AstronSoul » Thu Dec 08, 2011 11:00 am

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Re: Ride the Lightning (AU) (Updated 12/06/2011)

Postby beautiful_love » Thu Dec 08, 2011 6:40 pm

So glad to see the update. Whew. I was getting worried there for a while. So glad to see Tara's leg healed now. And I'm very excited about the introduction of the newest characters.

I love Pura! I think it's my love of animals. But I'm liking the developing story between her and Astron. Very fun to read.

“Well. Hello, Ms. Kitty,” Willow called out to the animal. The redhead turned to Tara, “Wonder what she wants. Should we go…um…say hi?”

“How do we say hi to a tiger?” Tara asked incredulously.

“Hi,” Willow demonstrated, waving her arm. Tara laughed.


Hillarious and so Willow. Only to be followed by this gem...

“You’re afraid of horses…yet this big tiger with huge teeth doesn’t scare you. You’re an enigma.”


So excited to see your back. Looking forward to the next update. :applause
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