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The Other Side (Updated 05/14/12)

Postby guitar_girl » Fri Oct 07, 2011 9:19 pm

TITLE:: The Other Side

AUTHOR:: guitar_girl

RATING:: PG-13 for right now. It could most definitely work itself into NC-17 at some point down the line. I will give fair warning when/if this happens!

DISCLAIMER:: Willow, Tara and any other BtVS characters, and maybe some scattered dialog, belong to Mutant Enemy. I have added a few original characters from my head that are my own!

SUMMARY:: I am soooooo bad at summarizing! AU and set in the mountains! Willow is in an accident and falls into a coma. Tara, Willow's best friend since middle school, is the only one that she can communicate with. Can Willow's love for Tara bring her back or is she lost to the other side forever?



FEEDBACK:: Yes please! I want brutal honesty!

AUTHOR’S NOTE:: Hello Kittens! This is my very first fic, well EVER! I have never really wrote anything before besides essays. This story does have angst but rest assured that things will be very much okay! I would like to thank my beta ExtraFlamey! This first chapter isn't hasn't been beta-d so everything is my fault! Well here goes nothing! I hope you guys enjoy!


Chapter 1

What am I thinking? She is getting away and I am just standing here in this shitty airport waiting on a plane to take me farther away from her. This isn’t where I need to be. This isn’t where I belong; I must be the stupidest person on this planet. My heart is pounding, but I know what I have to do. She is worth giving everything up for. All my dreams didn’t mean anything without her. I thought that that plane leaving in thirty minutes was my ticket to leave this town, and all my pain behind, but I was wrong. I have one chance to make this right and find my way into her arms; that was my real dream. I love her, and she needs to know it. I already left her once, and I can’t do it again. No, I won’t do it again.

My mind was made up, I was going after her. I had too. She was my future, not this. I couldn’t live without her. I refuse to live without her. I knew I had to go now if I had any chance of catching up to her. If I left now, that plane would leave without me and there was no turning back. Everything that I had worked for in my life would be gone, and I would be running the opposite direction but I didn’t care, if my future wasn’t with her, then it was a future that I didn’t want. I was trying to form a plan in my head but the only thing my mind was screaming was, ‘run fast.’

That was it. That was my plan. It was the only plan that I had so it would have to do. I didn’t exactly have the proper running attire, but I didn’t care. I slung off my heels, grabbed my stuff, and threw it at the lady behind the counter.

“I’m sorry miss, but I have to go, would you put these behind the counter? Thanks!” I didn’t even wait for a response before I was making a bee line for the door. I was running with everything that I had in me. It was raining and foggy outside but I didn’t care.

I had to catch her. I ran to the parking lot scanning desperately for a glimpse of her car. I almost threw up when I saw the spot, where we had pulled in earlier, was empty. I almost lost it right there. She was gone, and I had let her go. My business suit was soaked already, and I felt the cold seeping into to my bones. My hair was plastered to my face, and I was panting. The rain running down my cheeks mingled with the tears streaking down my face, as I pushed my hand back through my hair. My knees were about to buckle when I looked up and saw her car, driving past the windows of the airport, on her way out.

“I still have a chance.” I said, with as much strength as I could muster, and began to run again. I took off with everything that I had in me. I had never been a strong runner, but I ran with a vigor that I had never felt before. My life depended on it and I knew it. If she made it past the red-light at the end of the airport's road, I knew I didn’t have a chance of catching her.

My feet pounded against the sidewalk as I rushed past the windows that she had just drove by. I was pushing people out of the way. I would have been screwed if this was a bigger airport, or even if it had been a little more hectic. The rain was on my side though; everyone wanted inside to be sheltered from the cold, wet stings that cascaded down from the angry sky.

I knew people were looking at me like I had lost my mind, but I didn’t care. I had lost my mind. I lost it when I let her walk out that door. I went crazy the moment I told her I never wanted to talk to her again. The whole thing was insane. Running down the road praying with every breath that I could still catch her was the sanest thing that I had done in a while. I had finally figured it out; the fog that clouded my mind was gone and I had to stop her from walking away forever. If I had to run a thousand miles to catch her I would.

I kept running; pushing myself to the brink going as fast as I ever had before. I couldn’t tell if the drumming in my head was the sound of my feet hitting the pavement or the pounding of my heart that was threatening to tear through my chest. I could tell that my feet were raw already from the sharp, uneven pavement that scraped the bottom of my feet every time I pushed off from it. None of it mattered.

She was the only thing that mattered. She was the only thing that ever mattered to me. When I ran around the curve of the road and saw her car slow to a stop, behind the pile up of traffic trying to get out of the airport, I knew that I still had a chance. I was so close to catching her. Just a little farther and I would be at her car.

I didn’t feel the cold, bitter rain cutting through me like a thousand sharp knives. I didn’t feel my legs trying to buckle beneath me. I didn’t feel the pain the stabbed me in the side like a dull knife, or the nausea that was telling my body to stop. I didn’t feel anything except for the hope that washed over me.

I was in my own world, and she was the center of it. She was always the center of my world. Everything always revolved around her, when it came to me. The center of my world was sitting in the car waiting for me.

I took in a deep breath and started to scream her name to the top of my lungs. This was it. I had her. I was walking on clouds now and nothing else mattered to me, not even the horn that sounded as I ran towards her car.

Time stood still as she turned in her car to look at me. I thought it was the sound of my voice, but I realize now that the rain was coming down too hard for her to hear me. It must have been the sound of the horn that caught her attention. It didn’t matter to me though because she saw me.

I knew there was a thousand watt smile on my face when she turned to look at me. She didn’t have the same look of happiness on her face though. She looked worried. I felt my smile fade into a look of confusion as I felt, more than saw, the beams of headlights on me.

All my senses came rushing back. I heard the horn still sounding, in the background, as time almost completely stood still. The rain was cascading down my face and into my eyes. I could hear its dull pounding hitting me and the cars around me. It sounded like drums against the pavement. I heard the sound of brakes squealing against the soaked pavement. The hammering of my heart returned, and I felt everything that I had ignored before: the nausea, the weakness of my legs, and the rawness of my bare feet. It was all becoming a sensory overload. Then it all stopped again when something hit me hard. The last thing I saw was the distressed look that crossed her face. Then I saw nothing but blackness. I felt nothing except the cold. I heard voices all around me, and her.

“No! Willow stay with me. I love you.” Her voice wrapped around me like a warm blanket and carried me off into the land of darkness and silence; her words staying with me as I drifted into nothingness.




So this is chapter 1. What do you guys think? Should I continue?
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Ariel » Sat Oct 08, 2011 6:56 pm

Dibs!!!

guitar_girl,

Hey, first off congratulations for having the courage to write and share it with others! It isn’t easy! So this flower is for you! :flower

Okay, you use a present-tense and it has an immediacy that’s effective, when you switch to a past tense it doesn’t mesh the same. Read this part over and see the tense change on the last sentence:
What am I thinking? She is getting away and I am just standing here in this shitty airport waiting on a plane to take me farther away from her. This isn’t where I need to be. This isn’t where I belong; I must be the stupidest person on this planet. My heart was pounding, but I knew what I had to do.

I’d rather see, “My heart is pounding, but I know what I have to do.” Okay I’m laying this out because you asked for brutal honesty. But let me also say that I make grammatical errors, spelling errors, and typographical errors AND I also make errors of tense, too. I’m in no way perfect and don’t pretend to be, but I'm throwing out a suggestion for you to consider.

I also want to highlight this passage which worked beautifully:
My business suit was soaked already, and I felt the cold seeping into to my bones. My hair was plastered to my face, and I was panting. The rain running down my cheeks mingled with the tears streaking down my face, as I pushed my hand back through my hair.


The detail was vivid and I could see it in my mind and feel it in my heart. It was powerful. The whole chase was intense, then the ending BAM!!!

I’m pulled in, so my vote is simple: KEEP WRITING! :kgeek :kgeek


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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Grimm » Sat Oct 08, 2011 8:44 pm

How awful!! This is gonna be a tear jerker :sob ... You have my attention and I look forward to more.
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Sat Oct 08, 2011 9:16 pm

AHHHHH my first feedback! I am super excited!

Ariel- Yes, brutal honesty! I love it! I totally see what you mean! Thanks so much for your input and the flower! Grammar is one of my weakest points! Thank you for looking at it! Thank you so much for your honesty and for reading! It means a lot to me! I hope you keep tuned in!

SMGOVAN- Thanks sooo much for reading! It means a lot! I will try not to make it too sad! Again thanks for reading :)

P.S. Ariel I fixed it! Thanks for helping me improve! :grin
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Finey_McFine » Sun Oct 09, 2011 12:43 pm

Hey There! :bigwave

Congrats on posting your first fic! :applause It's daunting, but I'm sure you know that there is much love on the KB!! :luv

I like the narrative from Willow's POV; I feel so bad for both of them. You started with a bang and should most definitely continue. Looking forward to the next chapter!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby True_Love » Sun Oct 09, 2011 1:33 pm

From one newbie to another, Welcome!

I just started my first fic as well and it takes a little while to build an audience but, you seem to have a great start to draw us kittens in. Also, your writing style choice using Willow's POV is a litte different so, it nice to see where you'll take it. Meeting Expectations by tarawillow4ever up in Pens does a great job playing wtih POV as well as, BeMyDeputy's Queen of Hearts and EasierSaid's Neverland, which is just amazing. You may want to look at these two fics if you haven't already.

I vote keep writing. You've definately caught my attention.
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby MmmTaraSoSmexy13 » Sun Oct 09, 2011 1:43 pm

Hey guitar_girl,
Well I have to say that you have hooked another person that wants to continue to read your writing. That was a very good start and now I am dying to know what the hell is going to happen. So yes, please continue to write. I almost fell out of my chair when you wrote:
Then it all stopped again when something hit me hard. The last thing I saw was the distressed look that crossed her face. Then I saw nothing but blackness. I felt nothing except the cold. I heard voices all around me, and her.
I think my heart literally stopped for a couple of seconds. I will be eagerly waiting for more.

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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Mon Oct 10, 2011 9:25 am

Hey guys! I am so excited for my feedback! I will post replies to those of you I haven't gotten to later today! I have to run to class right now, but I just wanted to say that you guys are very encouraging and it means a lot! I wasn't planning on posting the next chapter till later in the week but I think I will go ahead and post it either tonight or tomorrow morning! I hope everyone's day goes wonderfully and I will talk to you guys later!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Mon Oct 10, 2011 4:55 pm

Okay! Now that I am done for the day I can reply to the lovely feedback!

Finey_McFine- Thanks so much for reading. It means a lot! I was definitely nervous about posting my first fic ever, but now I am glad I did! Thanks for your comments! Please keep reading!


True_Love- Thanks for reading and congratulations on your first fic as well! I honestly don't know why I picked to right in Willow's point of view, it just seemed more mysterious and I need that space between her and Tara. Even though obviously they will end up together I like to keep one side a mystery. I'm weird haha. I have got to go leave feedback for your story because I love it! Thanks for your vote to keep writing!


MmmTaraSoSmexy13- Thanks! I really am glad that I am hooking people! I just hope that I don't let you guys down! Thanks for taking time to read and I am sorry about your heart lol but happy at the same time! I hope you continue to check in!


Okay thank you everyone and I am crossing my fingers that chapter 2 is received as well as chapter 1. Please stay tuned and I hope y'all enjoy! Remember I want you to be honest and I love ALL feedback! Thanks again cause it really means a lot!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Mon Oct 10, 2011 5:03 pm

TITLE:: The Other Side

AUTHOR:: guitar_girl

RATING:: PG-13 for right now. It could most definitely work itself into NC-17 at some point down the line. I will give fair warning when/if this happens!

DISCLAIMER:: Willow, Tara and any other BtVS characters, and maybe some scattered dialog, belong to Mutant Enemy. I have added a few original characters from my head that are my own!

SUMMARY:: I am soooooo bad at summarizing! AU and set in the mountains! Willow is in an accident and falls into a coma. Tara, Willow's best friend since middle school, is the only one that she can communicate with. Can Willow's love for Tara bring her back or is she lost to the other side forever?



FEEDBACK:: Yes please! I want brutal honesty!

AUTHOR’S NOTE:: Hello Kittens! This is my very first fic, well EVER! I have never really wrote anything before besides essays. This story does have angst but rest assured that things will be very much okay! I would like to thank my beta ExtraFlamey! It means a lot that you are taking time to help me with my story!

Chapter 2

They say that when you die, your entire life flashes before your eyes. That isn’t entirely accurate, but it does have a bit of truth to it. I guess it's different for everyone, but I know what I saw. It wasn’t my entire life, but in a way it was. It was her. She was my life and I lived for her, and I even died for her. I loved her until my heart stopped beating and I took my last breath.

The last thing that I left the world with was the sound of her voice telling me that she loved me; now I am here. After the darkness came I saw visions of her; the good times and all the bad mixed in together filling my head and all my senses.

Then I was here, standing over my body watching as people surround me. I didn’t know if I was alive, dead, or a weird combination of both. I wasn’t cold or wet anymore, and all the pain that I had felt before had left my body.

I wore the same clothes as I had on before the accident. I looked like I did the moment before the car had hit me. I felt a sense of freedom and a need to move on and let go. Like something greater was calling me until I saw her.

She was a spark of color in a world full of black and white. Her gorgeous blue eyes were blazing, contrasting against the darkness of the day. The rain had matted her hair to her face; it soaked her beautiful, red, sheer shirt, making it cling to her cami that was underneath, and her jeans were drenched, clinging to her legs like a second skin. She was holding my lifeless hand and I could tell that she was crying even though the rain merged with her tears.

I felt my sense of freedom wash away with her cascading tears. I felt the need to stay with her and comfort her. I suddenly realized that I couldn’t leave without telling her how I felt about her. I felt a weird warming sensation start to flow into my hand. It kept me tethered to this reality where I was in love. I had never got to be with her, how could I leave her now?

I realized the warm, tingling sensation was where she was holding on to my flesh body. I couldn’t leave her no matter what. I had to stay with her somehow. I would do everything in my power to be with her forever, alive or dead.

If I actually was dead, I would stay with her and protect her. I would be her personal guardian angel. My mind was made up. I pushed all the feelings of needing to move on away from me and focused solely on her and my love for her. The warm sensation moved from my hand and swept through my entire being.

I heard the sirens of the paramedics and police on their way. They were close but were they close enough to save me? Tara didn’t even flinch until they ran up beside her and pulled my motionless hand away from her, moving me onto a white gurney that they lifted into the back of an ambulance.

My new body instantly missed the feeling of her hand in mine. I felt the warm tingling sensation depart from my body instantly, leaving me cold inside. She was my fire and my life, the only thing that kept me here.

She ran back to her car to follow the ambulance as it left with me, running emergency traffic. I thought about how she didn’t need to be alone in the car, driving, in conditions like these, and before I realized what had happened, I was in the passenger’s seat beside of her.

I was amazed, and a little fearful, at what I had just done. Well, at least I am getting the hang of what to do already. I wonder if there is some kind of handbook, or at least a customer service number that I could call. Maybe there will be a class, how to be a ghost 101, or something. I inwardly chuckled at the thought of a bunch of ghosts, haunting a classroom, trying to learn how to scare people.

I stopped thinking about that and focused my attention back to Tara. She was crying hysterically and whispering, “Please don’t be gone,” over and over. I wanted to take her pain away, at least soothe her in some way, before I could stop myself I reached over to lay my hand on her thigh but it passed right through her.

It hurt to know that I might never be able to touch her again, never feel her skin underneath my fingers. I could never comfort her with a hug or a touch again; this new-found knowledge would have killed me if my heart hadn’t already stopped beating. I was almost too upset to notice the momentary look of calmness that washed over Tara’s face. The hope, that I had almost lost, rushed back into me suddenly when she reached a hand down to place it on the spot that my incorporeal hand had passed through just a moment before.

She had felt me; it was unmistakable. There was still a chance that I could reach her, and somehow I would find a way. I would use every ounce of energy that I had to cross that barrier and let her know that I was here for her, forever, no matter what.



Okay that was chapter 2! Hope it was good! Thanks everyone for reading!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby beautiful_love » Mon Oct 10, 2011 5:42 pm

Wow. Very interesting so far. I'm definitely looking forward to more because I have no idea where you're going to take this. So please, continue.
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby MmmTaraSoSmexy13 » Mon Oct 10, 2011 6:00 pm

Wow. I am really liking how the story is going so keep it up.
I wonder if there is some kind of handbook, or at least a customer service number that I could call. Maybe there will be a class, how to be a ghost 101, or something.
I like this part very much. It sounds something that Willow would say. It sweet that Tara can feel Willow. I wonder where you are going with this and I can't wait for the next update.

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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Grimm » Mon Oct 10, 2011 6:03 pm

Wow...outstanding second chapter! If this story was not on pens, I would probably be terrified right now. The love and devotion that Willow feels for Tara is so beautiful. Hurry with the next update!!!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Finey_McFine » Mon Oct 10, 2011 9:57 pm

Really great update! All this love that Willow is feeling towards Tara is obviously pretty powerful if Tara is feeling her from 'the other side.' I'm seriously hoping that Willow is just having a sort of out of the body experience right now and is not really dead. Oh hell, it's the KB...she couldn't stay dead anyway, right???

This is completely different from anything else I've read and I'm loving it! Update soon!!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby True_Love » Tue Oct 11, 2011 1:24 pm

Alright, that was hmmm, cool, different, beautiful, I don't know. I couldn't help but think of Beetlejuice when Willow was talking about a handbook for the dead. It kinda made me giggle a little bit. The rest was, a little feaky mixed with awww so, I am really interested to see where you are going from here. I have definately never read anything like it before.

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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Ariel » Tue Oct 11, 2011 6:18 pm

guitar_girl:

Hey, loving this! Like the serious take on death, needing to move on the continued journey AND the comic thoughts (see below)

She was a spark of color in a world full of black and white.

Great image: Vivid and powerful!

I felt my sense of freedom wash away with her cascading tears. I felt the need to stay with her and comfort her. I suddenly realized that I couldn’t leave without telling her how I felt about her. I felt a weird warming sensation start to flow into my hand. It kept me tethered to this reality where I was in love. I had never got to be with her, how could I leave her now?

Imaginative take on being dead, the first sentence is very affecting and I like that the warmth of her hand kept you “tethered to this reality where I was in love.” All in all a great paragraph. I think the one immediately after could be re-written to be a little tighter it seems to be almost a repeat of the first, more powerful one. Think it over . . . and please realize that I really enjoy this fic and the narrator’s powerful voice.

I wonder if there is some kind of handbook, or at least a customer service number that I could call. Maybe there will be a class, how to be a ghost 101, or something. I inwardly chuckled at the thought of a bunch of ghosts, haunting a classroom, trying to learn how to scare people.

:lmao :rofl :lmao

She had felt me; it was unmistakable. There was still a chance that I could reach her, and somehow I would find a way. I would use every ounce of energy that I had to cross that barrier and let her know that I was here for her, forever, no matter what.


TOTALLY pulled in! :kgeek :kgeek

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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Thu Oct 13, 2011 9:30 am

Deleted because of technical difficulties!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Thu Oct 13, 2011 9:30 am

Dear Readers,

I have to say I am addicted to this! I really didn't think that I would be checking my story so much to see how many people have read it. To those of you that have I thank you from the bottom of my heart! It really means a lot too me, even if you are a lurker like I use to be. To those of you that have read it and left feedback I am eternally grateful because it lets me know that I am not posting in vain. Please keep me informed of how I am doing! Now for the individual feedback.


beautiful_love- Thanks so much for reading and I hope you continue to read. I really hope to keep it interesting for you. I hopefully should not disappoint if I stick to the chapters that I have already written. I hope you continue to read and leave feedback! Have a great day!


MmmTaraSoSmexy13-
I wonder if there is some kind of handbook, or at least a customer service number that I could call. Maybe there will be a class, how to be a ghost 101, or something


Ha I loved this part when I was writing it! Everything just seemed a little too serious, even though it was meant to be serious I wanted that little bit of comic relief. I wanted to mix a bit of pure Willow in there. She will show up very soon and start being Willow, but I needed to convey a deepness in these first few chapters. Hopefully more of the Willow-y dialogue that we all know and love will show up a little more later. I just read that again and I have no idea if anything I said made any sense to any one but me, but I hope you got it.

Thanks for the encouragement and hopefully you will stick around and keep reading and leaving feedback! Have a great day!


SMGOVAN- Thanks! And thanks for sticking with the story and leaving feedback! HAHAHA if it wasn't on pens I would be terrified too. I do give you a promise that they will be together at the end! I don't want to promise that, I want to keep you guessing until the end, but you are right this is pens and BLESS happy endings! As for the devotion I wanted to convey a sense of she would do anything for Tara. I mean she almost destroyed the world for her in season sux! That is devotion even though it was pointed in the wrong direction. I just kinda wanted to take that devotion and point it elsewhere. If that makes any sense hahaha. Well I really hope that you continue to read! Please keep leaving feedback! Have a great day!


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Finey_McFine wrote:All this love that Willow is feeling towards Tara is obviously pretty powerful if Tara is feeling her from 'the other side.'


This, arguably, is the best couple that I have ever seen on TV. It certainly was the best couple that they ever had on BtVS. They were the light and the safety of the show. What they did when they split them up and made Willow a magic addict sucked, but Willow changed for Tara, and for herself. To get Tara back. Love conquered an addiction and being a child that grew up in the home of an addict, it really hit home. That someone was strong enough to give up there addiction, no matter what it was, for love. That's powerful and it showed a true devotion that Willow had even though she done some naughty things in the past. They were the only couple in the show that were separated without giving up with each other. Tara was forcefully taken from Willow and it turned Willow dark, and into a place of grief and evil so horrible that our lovable Willow was gone. Even though it sucked where they took it, it did show a devotion beyond that I have ever seen. I have to admit that if something ever happened to the one that I loved and someone was responsible for it, well it wouldn't be pretty. I just really wanted to convey that.

Hopefully that wasn't too much info! I know season sux well really sucks, and I hope I didn't offend anyone for saying anything. Thanks Finey_McFine!

Finey_McFine wrote:I'm seriously hoping that Willow is just having a sort of out of the body experience right now and is not really dead. Oh hell, it's the KB...she couldn't stay dead anyway, right???


I guess we will just have to see where it goes Thanks for reading and I hope that you will stick with the story and leave more feedback. Have a great day


True_Love- Thanks for coming back and giving the second chapter a read! I really like your reactions..."the I don't know" kind of scares me to be honest hahaha. Is it a good "i don't know" or a bad one? I really like that you say that it is different and beautiful though! Those are really good words! Woohoo for me! Beetlejuice! I haven't seen that since I was like five! I am really going to have to re-watch it now! I am glad that that part made you giggle! It was made for a little bit of comic relief! Thanks for your vote to keep writing, so I'm hoping that "I don't know" came down on the side of good! Thanks and I hope you keep reading and leaving feedback! Have a good day!


Ariel- Thanks for coming back!

Ariel wrote:She was a spark of color in a world full of black and white.


I had hoped this would be a powerful image and I am glad that you thought it actually was! YAY!

Ariel wrote:Imaginative take on being dead, the first sentence is very affecting and I like that the warmth of her hand kept you “tethered to this reality where I was in love.” All in all a great paragraph. I think the one immediately after could be re-written to be a little tighter it seems to be almost a repeat of the first, more powerful one. Think it over . . . and please realize that I really enjoy this fic and the narrator’s powerful voice.


I will most definitely go and take a look! Thanks for the advice! I wanted Tara to be an anchor for Willow here in this world just like she was in the episode "Who Are You" in season 4!


I am really glad that you liked my little but of comic relief! I wanted it to fit without disrupting anything in the story and it seems to be liked overall!

I am really glad that you pulled in! I just hope that you continue to be pulled in and leave feedback cause it is kinda like crack! Have a great day!




Update coming right now!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Thu Oct 13, 2011 9:41 am

TITLE:: The Other Side

AUTHOR:: guitar_girl

RATING:: PG-13 for right now. It could most definitely work itself into NC-17 at some point down the line. I will give fair warning when/if this happens!

DISCLAIMER:: Willow, Tara and any other BtVS characters, and maybe some scattered dialog, belong to Mutant Enemy. I have added a few original characters from my head that are my own!

SUMMARY:: I am soooooo bad at summarizing! AU and set in the mountains! Willow is in an accident and falls into a coma. Tara, Willow's best friend since middle school, is the only one that she can communicate with. Can Willow's love for Tara bring her back or is she lost to the other side forever?



FEEDBACK:: Yes please! I want brutal honesty! The more feedback the better!

AUTHOR’S NOTE:: Hello Kittens! This is my very first fic, well EVER! I have never really wrote anything before besides essays. This story does have angst but rest assured that things will be very much okay! I would like to thank my beta ExtraFlamey! It means a lot that you are taking time to help me with my story!


Chapter 3

Before I realized what was happening we were in the hospital parking lot and she was running from the car.

“Well crap, this whole running around thing is getting kind of old.” I said exasperated as I went through the door of the car instead of opening it and running after Tara.

I had to try to reach her again. There was no way that was just a coincidence that she happens to touch the same exact spot on her leg that I tried to touch. Things like that just don’t happen by chance.

It drove me knowing that my love for her could cross the barriers between life and death itself. Truthfully, I didn’t know if it was my love or just a freak accident that made her touch her leg, if it was even either of those possibilities. It could be something else entirely. Maybe it is just one of the things I could do with anyone now. I really had to learn what I could and couldn’t do now.

I finally caught up to Tara at the ER doors. She was standing there banging her fists on the doors screaming at them to let her in. I just wanted her to stop hurting and comfort her. I wanted to take her into my arms and tell her that everything would be okay; I would never leave her. I wanted to press my lips on her forehead and tell her how much that I loved her and how I would do anything to stay with her and that I would give up heaven for her and I probably already had. She was my heaven, my life, my everything, my eternity.

Instead, I just stood there and watched her cry. My un-beating heart was breaking into a thousand pieces, and I didn’t know what to do to help her. I couldn’t do anything except watch her cry. I saw an older lady in scrubs coming down the hall towards the door that we were standing at. Short with black hair that had been flecked with grey, she looked like she had seen too much in her lifetime and needed a vacation badly. But she had a kindness to her eyes that would make anyone trust her instantly, probably a great nurse to have around. Hey, maybe she was my nurse. She came to the door and opened it slightly, and I hoped that she would just give Tara the bad news and get it over with.

“Miss, are you okay? You can’t be back here unless you are family. What can I help you with?” The nurse had a look of worry in her compassionate eyes as she stepped through the large wooden doors and placed her careworn and burdened hand on Tara’s slumped shoulder.

“My best friend was just hit by a car. I am her only family and I need to see her. Willow Rosenberg, her name is Willow Rosenberg. Please help me, I have to see her. We got in a fight before she was hit and the last words I said to her, well I don’t want them to be the very last things that I want her to hear from me, please. I don’t even know if she is alive.” Tara’s voice was breaking and there were more tears streaming down her face. She was pleading with the nurse with everything that she had left in her.

I knew the answer to Tara’s question. I mean, why else would I be here as a spirit? I had to be dead, and I had already accepted it. That is just how the world worked, but I guess I wasn’t a part of that world anymore. I never imagined that I would be a ghost, but everyone dies. I just died a little before I expected to.

I braced myself for Tara’s reaction when the nurse told her that I was dead, not knowing how well she would take it. I mean we were best friends even if she didn’t love me the way that I loved her, and I knew she still cared about me even if I had been a complete jerk to her earlier. We had been inseparable for the last decade, until today, and it had to have some impact on her. I didn't know if I could handle her in that much pain.

“She is alive, but not doing well.” the nurse said, giving Tara hope and spinning me into a reality that I had not expected.

“She’s alive.” she whispered and breathed out a sigh of relief. “Then I have to see her!” Tara commanded as she tried to brush past the nurse and get through the doors that had already locked again.

“Miss, I am sorry but they have already taken Ms. Rosenberg to surgery. I really am sorry. I wish that there was something that I could do. She was in pretty bad shape and had to be rushed to surgery immediately. I’m so sorry.” The nurse had unshed tears in her eyes and she was trying to make Tara understand that it was impossible for her to see me now.

My mind was still wrapping around what the kind nurse had told Tara. I was alive. I was still breathing and was in surgery. My heart was still beating. I could come back from this and hold her in my arms again. Everything could turn out okay. I just had to get through surgery.

“Okay, I’ll wait. Please have the doctor keep me informed.” Her reaction was now almost catatonic and placid. She seemed if she had slipped into a different world.

“I can do that. If you need anything just let me know, I will do anything I can to help you out. My name is Janice. Just ask for me if you need anything. I didn’t catch your name?” she questioned as she seemed genuinely worried about Tara.

“Tara. Tara Maclay. Thank you for everything, it really means a lot.” Tara said softly as a spark started to come back into her deep blue eyes, still swollen from all the crying that she had done today. I could see more tears threatening to gush out at any moment.

“Okay, Tara, let’s get you set up in the waiting room.” she said, moving her hand to Tara’s back and guiding her down the hallway. I followed close behind them as she ushered Tara into a small blue room. The front wall was glass so that you could see out into the hallway and there were two plushy looking leather couches that faced a TV mounted to the wall. There was a big wooden door that had a picture of a cartoon man and women on the front of it, leading into the sterile bathroom. I guess if you really wanted to you could get some privacy in there because none was promised in here. The nurse sat Tara down on one of the couches and said a few parting words before leaving.
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby MmmTaraSoSmexy13 » Thu Oct 13, 2011 10:33 am

Whoo I got DIBS!! Yay! Oh and yay! for updates. I like where this is going but i really don't like that the chapters are short. It kinda leaves me in a "I can't wait for the next update" kind of mood. But maybe that is what you want to do, make readers keep coming back to have peace of mind since you almost killed Willow lol. Anyways keep it up, it sounds good and very sad. Hopefully happy times will be coming very soon.

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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Ariel » Thu Oct 13, 2011 1:46 pm

Hey!

Exciting to see an update and exciting to see your joy in writing! You know what? Most of us would say that the you is still there! And feedback is golden, so I'm glad to throw some shiny stuff your way!

This whole fic - BANG, what an opening! Totally got my attention.

Their love, really shining through . . . :flower

Kind of crazy with work stuff, but thanks for this story and as always, keep writing! :kgeek

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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Grimm » Thu Oct 13, 2011 3:14 pm

Yay another update!...Hmmm, I am very curious about the nature of their last conversation :hmm . What was said? I can't wait to read the backstory on their friendship....Sad Tara :(( is very much of the bad as far as I'm concerned. Keep up the good work.
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Finey_McFine » Thu Oct 13, 2011 3:20 pm

Yay for the quick update! Glad to see that Willow is clinging to life. Now I really need to know what they were fighting about before Willow got out of the car. So glad the nurse didn't hassle Tara for not being family; hopefully they continue to treat her right and allow her to see Willow after the surgery.


Anxiously awaiting your next update!! :peace
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby beautiful_love » Thu Oct 13, 2011 4:54 pm

Very fast update, I'm impressed. And a really good one at that. Totally hoping Willow's ok and I'm sure you won't let us down. It was nice to see someone show a little compassion to Tara. But I'm really wondering when you're going to tell us what all was said in that last conversation they had with each other. Looking forward to more. :)
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby True_Love » Thu Oct 13, 2011 5:03 pm

Okay, I figured out something about myself. I realized after reading this post what my ambivilance was in reading your previous chapters. Dialog. It kind of feels like I have been swimming underwater for two chapters waiting to take a breath and when there was finally some conversation in this chapter I could breathe. I know you're writing from Willows POV and I think it has been some really power stuff but, I really miss the dialog that I normally read in stories.

Wherever you take this I am sure it will be awesome even if it ends up not being my kind of story. The differences between us all is what makes us great. I'm still interested to see where you take this and will keep following.

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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Mgraham93 » Fri Oct 14, 2011 4:36 am

This is a really great start- the opening seemed like the opposite to the ending of a rom com chasing someone out of an airport rather than to the airport but with a great twist.

I finally caught up to Tara at the ER doors. She was standing there banging her fists on the doors screaming at them to let her in. I just wanted her to stop hurting and comfort her. I wanted to take her into my arms and tell her that everything would be okay; I would never leave her. I wanted to press my lips on her forehead and tell her how much that I loved her and how I would do anything to stay with her and that I would give up heaven for her and I probably already had. She was my heaven, my life, my everything, my eternity.
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I like the use of the first person from Willow's point of view, it really adds to the intensity of the situation.

Can't wait for more.
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Sun Oct 23, 2011 9:19 pm

Hello kittens!


Mgraham93- Thanks for leaving feedback! I am really glad that I have hooked another reader! Thanks for commenting on the POV! I was hoping to add intensity by doing it this way and I am glad that it happened! I hope that you continue to read and post feedback!

True_Love- Hey! I am glad that you came back to read some more! And super glad that you left feedback!
Okay, I figured out something about myself. I realized after reading this post what my ambivilance was in reading your previous chapters. Dialog. It kind of feels like I have been swimming underwater for two chapters waiting to take a breath and when there was finally some conversation in this chapter I could breathe. I know you're writing from Willows POV and I think it has been some really power stuff but, I really miss the dialog that I normally read in stories.


Well if it makes you feel any better the dialog is coming very soon. I am just glad that you are still reading! Thanks again so much!



beautiful_love- Thanks so much for stopping back in and reading and leaving more feedback! Not such a fast update this time, sorry. The time will come very soon when I tell you there previous conversation! I am looking forward to getting your comments on the next update!


Finey_McFine- Thanks for leaving feedback and still following the story! I grew up in a small town where no one really questions anything in the hospitals. There aren't really any rules about who gets to see you or anything...I mean there is but they aren't really followed per se. I guess it just carried over into my writing so there will definitely be no drama over Tara getting to see Willow.



SMGOVAN- Hahaha you will get some of the backstory fairly soon as well as there last conversation. Thanks for reading and following my story and returning with more feedback!




Ariel- Thanks for returning and thanks for the encouragement! I hope that you keep leaving feedback and keep reading! I am glad that it is attention grabbing and hopefully will keep your attention!


MmmTaraSoSmexy13- Thanks for still reading and leaving feedback. Yes the updates are short. I really don't mean for them to be though. It just all gets shrunk down when I put it in here. I get disappointed myself when I see them. The chapters in the future will hopefully be a little bit longer. It is so much bigger in word! Happy times are definitely on the way but I can't promise how soon they will be.





Again thanks to everyone for reading! I hope that I am not an utter failure at this! I am super tired right now or I would write more!
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby guitar_girl » Sun Oct 23, 2011 9:24 pm

TITLE:: The Other Side

AUTHOR:: guitar_girl

RATING:: PG-13 for right now. It could most definitely work itself into NC-17 at some point down the line. I will give fair warning when/if this happens!

DISCLAIMER:: Willow, Tara and any other BtVS characters, and maybe some scattered dialog, belong to Mutant Enemy. I have added a few original characters from my head that are my own!

SUMMARY:: I am soooooo bad at summarizing! AU and set in the mountains! Willow is in an accident and falls into a coma. Tara, Willow's best friend since middle school, is the only one that she can communicate with. Can Willow's love for Tara bring her back or is she lost to the other side forever?



FEEDBACK:: Yes please! I want brutal honesty! The more feedback the better!

AUTHOR’S NOTE:: Hello Kittens! This is my very first fic, well EVER! I have never really wrote anything before besides essays. This story does have angst but rest assured that things will be very much okay! I would like to thank my beta ExtraFlamey! It means a lot that you are taking time to help me with my story!


Chapter 4


Tara sat unmoving, looking at the blank TV mounted on the wall. It was already on some home shopping network. Nothing says your loved one may die like an egg slicer, for $19.95 plus shipping and handling, I guess. She was staring right through the TV not even paying attention to the Billy Mayes replacement.

My mind was not on the egg slicer or the openness of the room or the creepy, too clean looking bathroom. It was on the fact that I could still live. I could come back to her and make this all better. Why was I here in this form if I wasn’t dead? I didn’t understand that part, but I guess it didn’t matter as long as I came back.

I walked over and sat down on the couch beside her. I just wanted to comfort her as well as being comforted myself as I didn’t know what was going to happen now. What happens if I die? Will I still be here or will I just disappear? I just wish I knew what to expect. The only thing that I was sure of was my love for her. I would fight to stay with her no matter what.

I reached out to touch her face. This was the moment of truth. If she responded like she did last time then I would know for sure that she could feel me here with her. If she did nothing then I would know that it was just a coincidence.

My transparent hand shook as I reached out slowly to stroke her cheek. My heart was pounding with an unadulterated need to touch her. My trembling, transparent fingers were so close to her slender cheek that I felt the warmth of her body warming my hand. I was so scared that it wouldn’t work and that she wouldn’t feel my hand caressing her cheek with all the love that I had flowing through me and into my fingertips. I had no choice but to try though.

I inhaled deeply as I braced myself for the touch. Just a few more millimeters and I would know for sure if she felt me here with her. My body was shaking all over and I felt like I had just got off of a rollercoaster as I closed the distance between my fingertips and her cheek. I felt my fingers slip though her cheek. It warmed my incorporeal body and lit a fire deep within my soul.It felt so good, but so completely unbearable at the same time and I wanted to cry as I sat there trying to stroke her cheek but not really being able to.

I was losing hope when she didn’t move as I maintained the attention on her cheek with my hand. I switched from stroking up her cheek with the back of my hand to just sitting there cupping her cheek in my non existent hand. In reality I was just sitting there with my hand hovering just on her skin while barley slipping through it, mingling our two life forces together. I had almost given up when I heard her sigh and reach up and slowly run her hand over the spot where my hand occupied.

I caught my breath and I almost screamed with unabashed joy when I realized that she could feel me, it was actually working. I had a renewed surge of optimism as I ran my hand through her beautiful, brown hair and back onto her cheek. Her hand returned to her lap as she just sighed and leaned into my touch. I kept it up as the warmth that flowed through my hand started to run up my arm. She was fueling my soul, and I could feel myself responding to the warmth that she was causing me, like an addict to their drug. Only I was addicted to her.

I almost jumped out of my translucent skin when I heard her speak. It broke me out of my stupor and made me realize where I was and what was happening. It almost made me sober up from the euphoric high I was getting from her warmth.

“I know I look stupid talking to myself in this waiting room but I don’t care. Willow, please be okay. I don’t know what I would do without you. We got into that stupid fight the last time we talked and if you leave me like that forever I am really going to be pissed at you. I don’t want those to be my last words to you. Please don’t let those be my last words to you when I have so much else to say. I know the nurse said that you were still alive but I can feel you here. I felt you in my car, and I feel you here beside me rubbing my cheek. You always know how to calm me down.” She paused a second to stop the tears from rolling down her face. I didn’t know what to do so I just sat and listened until she was done.

“How can I feel you here with me when you are supposed to be alive? Are you really here or am I already going crazy without you? Please, just don’t leave me." she seemed so broken, but then a fire lit up behind her eyes making them blaze. "I also want to know what the hell you were doing in the middle of the damn road. It was stupid and selfish." she had raised her voice into her stern mode, but she didn't speak above a whisper. Her arms were talking with her, flailing around trying to make every point just a little bit stronger. "Look what you have gotten yourself into. I leave you alone for twenty minutes and you go and get yourself killed. That is just like you to go and do something so stupid so that I wouldn’t be mad at you anymore. Well, damn you Willow, because it worked. You hear me Willow Rosenberg, it worked! So just come back to me so I can kick your ass for being so stupid." She deflated as she looked up towards the ceiling. "Please, please, come back to me.” her voice faded at the end of her plea as her head dropped downwards making her hair fall around her face like curtains hiding a tragic scene. She brought on hand up to cup her head as she rested upon it and I saw tears falling slowly from her face and soaking her already wet jeans some more.

I could feel myself crying, even though I knew it should be impossible. I wanted to tell her that everything would be alright even if I wouldn't. I wanted to let her know that I was here with her and that I would always be here with her, death couldn’t change that. I moved my hand from her cheek to her hand. Instead of hovering over it, like I was trying to do with her cheek, I let my hand disappear and meld into her hand. I saw another tear run down her cheek as she took her other hand and put it on top of our bonded hands as if she was trying to comfort me.

I opened my mouth to tell her that everything was going to be okay no matter what happened when a nurse entered the room with an older doctor. He was ruggedly handsome and had a wisdom that shone in his gray eyes through his glasses. He was tall, though not a giant, and looked in pretty good shape for his age. He had a kind smile that automatically made you feel like family when he looked at you.

“Ms. Maclay? Tara Maclay?” The doctor asked, in a British accent, as he walked in.

“Yes, that's me. Is the surgery over already? Is she okay?” Tara questioned him frantically.

“Ms. Maclay, I am Dr. Giles, it is a pleasure to meet you, though I just wish it were under different circumstances.” He paused to take off his glasses and wipe them. It looked like a nervous habit that he had developed over the years. “You are Ms. Rosenberg’s emergency contact. Does she have any other family that we need to contact?” he asked, putting his glasses back on and avoiding Tara’s question for a moment.

“I am all the family she had. I mean she has more friends, but no family. Is she okay, doctor?” Tara asked again, her knees wobbling and getting ready to buckle beneath her. I stood up and tried to place a steadying hand at the small of her back but it just hovered there useless. I knew it wasn’t completely useless when I heard her intake a quick breath.

“Tara, Willow sustained quite a few injuries in the accident. She has a broken arm and both of her legs are broken from where the car hit her. She has major cuts and bruises everywhere. We were able to repair the internal bleeding that she sustained; unfortunately, there was also some head trauma. I am afraid that Ms. Rosenberg is in a coma, and as is the case with all comas, the longer that she takes to wake up the less likely she is to wake up at all. I’m sorry; I know how hard this must be. She has the best care and she is as comfortable as we can make her. I’m afraid the rest is just a waiting game.”

“Thank you for everything that you have done. I know it would mean a lot to Willow. It means a lot to me.” She said as she stood up shaking his hand as if they had just played a game of basketball and she had lost. There was silent tears running down her face now, and I wanted to wipe them away for her. “Can I see her?” she asked pleading with the doctor.

“Yes, I think that'll be all right. I will take you down there.” He moved to the door, paused for Tara to follow him and strode off down the corridor.

I walked behind them wondering what I would look like when I saw myself. I wonder if I could just hop back into my body. What would happen if I could hop back into my body? Would I remain in a coma, only trapped in my mind, or would I wake up? It was scary to think about but I had to try something.

I stood just outside the doorway that Tara and Giles had just gone through. I didn’t know how prepared I was to see my body laying there without me in it. I know I saw it at the sight of the accident but I was in shock and now the reality of it all was hitting me all at once.

I heard Dr. Giles speak after a few moments of silence in the room, my room, room 315. “Tara, I am going to give you some time alone. If you need anything please feel free to have someone page me. I will answer any questions you might have.”

“Thank you, Dr. Giles. You are a very kind man.” she said, acknowledging Dr. Giles as he left the room giving her a very concerned look.

The doctor came out of the room, passing right through my invisible body. It was nothing like the touches with Tara. It was cold and unfamiliar but it didn’t hurt at all. Dr. Giles stopped instantly turning around and giving the spot where I was standing a very curious look. He quickly brushed off the encounter and moved steadily down the hallway.

I stood there for just a second and decided that I might as well face myself sometime. I walked slowly into the room where I saw Tara standing at the foot of my bed staring at my broken body with a deep sadness darkening her beautiful blue eyes.

I looked so small. I know I am a small girl but I always thought of myself as strong and unbreakable. I was always tough as nails growing up. I was the girl that would laugh when everyone else was crying. I could always pick myself up, brush myself off, and go on stronger than before but I didn't know if I could pick myself up this time, from this fall. I was really broken.

Both my legs were in casts and my left arm was also in a cast where it had broken my fall on the pavement. My face was bruised all over and I could see black and blue peeking out from all around my gown. I guess the FBI wouldn’t want this anymore. All I saw when I looked at myself was broken goods and broken dreams. It was worth it though. I had almost caught her.

Technically, I had caught her, but this wasn’t exactly what I would call a win for the team. I was dying and she was devastated, but at least she was here with me. I didn’t even deserve that. I deserved to be alone in this room and her to be happy somewhere else.
I wish that she hadn’t seen me get hit by that car. She could be somewhere getting over our friendship, instead of being trapped in this hell with me. I wished I could take her pain away but I was the one causing it. It’s always the same old song and dance.

“Willow? Can you hear me? Please wake up, Willow. Please wake up. I need you. Who am I gonna fight with? Who am I going to watch Bones with? Who is gonna scare the living shit outta every boy that comes within ten feet of me? Who is going to drive me absolutely insane? Who is going to drag me out of the house when I want to hole up in my room? Who is going to call me beautiful and make me feel special no matter how I feel? I need you, Willow. I don’t know if I can handle not getting one of your random goofy drawing text messages to make my day better. Please, please come back to me. I love you.” Tara was sobbing at the foot of my bed. Her hand was hovering over my legs. I could tell that she wanted to reach out and grab me and hold on for dear life but she was afraid that she would hurt me.

“Oh God, Tara, I love you more than you will ever know! I will never leave you. I promise I will never leave you.” I said it out loud, my voice cracking, tears running down my face. I just wanted to hold her in my arms and kiss away her pain.

Willow? Oh my god, Willow, was that you? Please don’t let me be imagining this.” She had instantly whirled around to where she thought my voice was coming from.

“You can hear me?” I said with obvious shock in my voice.
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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby AstronSoul » Sun Oct 23, 2011 9:53 pm

DIBS

And Wow I finally caught onto this story!!!

First Welcome (a lil late but better late then never!!! :grin )

This is a new look on our favorite duo, right off with the hardships.

I am on the edge of my seat wanting more more more lol The way you are writing the characters keeps drawing me further and further in.

Great Job!!!!

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Re: The Other Side (First Fic)

Postby Grimm » Mon Oct 24, 2011 9:11 am

Great update. I love the Giles addition to the story. So, our girls can communicate with eachother? That's a good start. Willow was leaving to take a job with the F.B.I? Can't wait to learn more..

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