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I'll be more coherent later.
ETA lots of stuff. Hopefully coherent:
Re: the S4 reference. Okay, you mean who they are as characters is more S4, not that the events match up. Willow and Tara, more than a lot of the Buffy characters, really change over the course of the Buffy storyline; by that criterion, they are certainly as much protagonists of the story as Buffy is. So yes, it makes sense.
Re: Buffy assuming Willow isn’t bi. Okay, I know I see the world with bi-tinted glasses. Still, her ammo is all “well, Willow likes boys, therefore she doesn’t like girls,” which is a logical error. I’m not saying logical errors are inconsistent for Buffy. I just want to smack her. Yes, she has years of experience with Willow, and no evidence she likes girls. That’s a much stronger position from which to argue. Again, totally in character, but with the making me want to smack her.
Re: Less/fewer. Oh, I totally agree that people use language differently than the rules would prescribe. I certainly try to write how people use language when I’m writing thoughts or spoken words, rather than how rules would say they should. I don’t it was wrong to have Willow think the technically incorrect word. I actually got a comment on my story mentioning that I pointed it out, though. I hope I don’t end up being remembered the chick who called Heather out on grammar.
Re: abused. Good abused! See, there was that reference to ‘Please’ in there that was aimed at conveying that I felt a more “yes, do it again” sort of abused rather than an “oh god make it stop” sort of abused. I think that technically might have been a sentence. So, I hope you aren’t too sad. And no, your dream sequences haven’t been deleted. But are you familiar with
signal to noise ratio problems? Even if your story had an index, it would need tags to show where said dream sequences where to find them. Which I might make one day when I’m bored.
Okay, so to the new section.
I’m new to San Diego, so I was just introduced to May Gray/June Gloom this year. It was neat to see it referenced and have me understand what it was.
"It's because sound carries further in the fog," the redhead explained. "Fog amplifies sound. It's why you can hear the horn all the way down here." Willow finished speaking and dipped her head. "Sorry."
"For what?" Tara asked with a slight tilt of her head.
"Being nerdy on such a pretty night." The redhead looked up, sheepishly.
"Not nerdy; smart," the blonde said with a bright smile.
So cute! Very, very, cute. I love nerds, and am a nerd, and I love that Tara has an appreciation for us.
Tara nodded. Her heart beat wildly, suspecting that Willow was referencing a conversation they had many years before.
I really like how this evening has had the girls making several references to their day in the park to each other, rather than just in their heads. Talk about flirting in code! Particularly since from what we’ve seen, it was Willow who really pulled away and was hurtful after said day; by alluding to it over and over again, it’s a good way to let Tara know her mindset is more like it was before she (I’m guessing here) spazzed the fuck out.
My mom has this idea about what is right, like she knows better than I do what is good for me, what my life should be like.
I think this is a really common problem for adult children; Willow might not notice, because she’s the only one of her close friends who are close to their parents. And based on the authority of having been born in New York City, I can say this is a pretty stereotypical Jewish mother thing. It is a good way to express what’s concerning her to Tara without screwing up her plans.
"Oh, that's," Willow stopped, momentarily speechless. "That's really sweet, Tara, but that's, way, way, too big of a job."
Out of curiosity, did you mean this to sound so much like the dolls eye crystal bit?
And Willow flinched.
They sure have walked themselves into a box, haven’t they? Tara’s told Willow that she would never, ever, EVER, be with someone who wasn’t out. Willow knows it would be selfish to act until she’s out, but has laid groundwork on the crystallizing assumption that when she does come out they can be together. Tara’s told Willow that she can be patient. Just earlier tonight! Willow has plans to come out this weekend. Tara suspects that these are her plans. So instead of just going to sit in separate rooms and not lay eyes on one another until the shitstorm hits and begins to pass, they go
do something so stupidly romantic one of them makes a move. See the above “AAA . . . .” It feels a kinda parallel to their day at the park. Nice day, lots of it together, fall asleep together and then . . . not so good.
I’m with Debra, though: if Willow’s next words don’t include ‘yet,’ I may have to hurt her. With my reality-to-fiction-piercing stabby-thing. Or she kiss her. That would also avoid my wrath.
I'm gonna be dead soon, jeez. 
wrong i tell you
(I can't say a terrible tease, because what you're doing here is too marvelous!)
