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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/02/2009

Postby sacinema » Thu Sep 03, 2009 12:26 pm

Woohoo. You are back with a new story. That is really wonderful. And again you take us to an amazing setting. Somehow I missed LLCTL in the first place. It's also wonderful. Insecure virgin western girl Willow meets the urban lesbian not really a myth Tara Maclay with the twisted humor. Great.

And Willow as Rose is hilarious. Very likeable and cute. I'm always Willow hooked but this Rose is a special one. Maclay needs to give some meaning to her live. In the end she might be more than willing to help Rose with her research. And if they come together it might seem like the circle closes. It all started with Willow and Tara. Actually they are the foundresses of two clans. Rose and Maclay are the last heiresses of both. That was a surprise but a good one. I really wondered how WT would fit into this family tree.

If I remember correctly Willow was 19 when they met. So it had to be 1871. Tara's first son was born in 1882. Makes it nearly 10 years inbetween. Willow's sun Daniel didn't seem to have a father. At least W wasn't married. They both died at a young age in the same year 1887. I do wonder what this is supposed to mean. Maybe they died together.

Did they split after 10 years? I do not believe they did. Something else must have made Tara to marry Ethan and have three children with him. Ethan of all men?

Who might Daniel's father be? Xander perhaps? Maybe Tara marrying Ethan was all part of a plan to get back to him. Seems like he betrayed Willow's father with the heritage. Will we learn to know how Ira came to death? I do suspect someone was involved in the way he died. Questions, a lot of questions.

Thanks again for the wonderful story. Can't wait for the next update.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/02/2009

Postby Anlorew » Thu Sep 03, 2009 7:33 pm

Great update! However it does bring up many questions. Obviously, what happened to Tara and Willow that made them supposedly break up and have children with other men? Who did Willow have a child with? How did Willow and Tara die? How much does Rose know? All very good questions... And let me say Deb, you've got my mind wandering. I'm very curious as to what will happen next. Perhaps another journal entry? I like those. Anyways, great update. Can't wait until the next one!
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/02/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Fri Sep 04, 2009 9:48 am

I'm not ready to post the next update for a few more days (I have 3-4 ready but don't want to run out when my writing time slows down) but I do have some responses to feedback written.

writerfreak – Hmmm. Shocker? Ok. I hope there will be more than one in this story. Thanks for commenting.



Anne – I’ve had that happen so many times with the fb. I actually type my long ones out on Word and then copy them in because I so distrust writing something long directly to KB. Anyway, I appreciate it even if I didn’t get to read it.



It's a great update and raises many questions. Can't wait to read the next instalment.
Thanks so much. I think the next may raise a few questions as well.



JujuDeRoussie – Thanks so much. There is more to come. I hear you about Rose’s feelings but I’d actually say that she’s relatively well balanced. She just happens to have a very obsessive concern and she has boiled her entire life, here entire family’s existence down to this one small thing. Or big thing. So she’s resentful but she believes she has a right to be.



I hope it doesn’t turn out badly for her either. We’ll see…



Thanks for your feedback.



Zampsa1975 – Thanks for your comments.
I wonder how Ethan got Tara to marry himself and abandon Willow...
An excellent question there. I think it will be mostly answered down the road.



I guess Willow was pretty devastated about that...
Hmmm. That seems like a reasonable assumption.



We’ll see how things go for Rose and Grand-me.



Thanks again.



sacinema – Yeah. I kind of feel guilty for starting this story because I have two unfinished ones. But this idea has been rolling around in my head since I wrote the first one. At first I imagined this being a one-shot but now I think it will be much longer.
Somehow I missed LLCTL in the first place. It's also wonderful. Insecure virgin western girl Willow meets the urban lesbian not really a myth Tara Maclay with the twisted humor. Great.
It was a bit buried but I’m glad you found it and loved it now.



I’m trying to not be too over the top in making Willow=Rose and Mac = Tara but that the deal. I’m glad it comes through. And yes, Mac needs something to do, to live for.
And if they come together it might seem like the circle closes. It all started with Willow and Tara. Actually they are the foundresses of two clans. Rose and Maclay are the last heiresses of both.
That’s a good way of thinking of it.



That was a surprise but a good one. I really wondered how WT would fit into this family tree.
Cool.



If I remember correctly Willow was 19 when they met. So it had to be 1871.
Yes. They met in 1871 when Willow was either 18 or 19. I’m playing a little fast and loose with ages later on in this story and going to let the reader assume that there are probably some questions regarding exact dates and such.



Tara's first son was born in 1882. Makes it nearly 10 years inbetween.
Correct.
Willow's sun Daniel didn't seem to have a father. At least W wasn't married.
No, she did not marry. As far as his father and her motivation… it will be forthcoming but the baby’s father will not be a force in his life.
They both died at a young age in the same year 1887.
Correct.



I do wonder what this is supposed to mean. Maybe they died together.
More details in the next update.



Did they split after 10 years? I do not believe they did. Something else must have made Tara to marry Ethan and have three children with him. Ethan of all men?
I’d say you’ve just hit on part of the mystery here. Some of this will be explained and some you’ll have to speculate on.



Who might Daniel's father be? Xander perhaps?
Spoiler – Xander is not Daniel’s father.



Seems like he betrayed Willow's father with the heritage.
I’m going to go ahead and call that the understatement of the month.



Ira had a heart attack and died. There’s really no mystery there and Ethan had nothing to do with it. In that way, Willow was just unlucky.



Thanks so much for your wonderful comments and questions. I had to refrain from saying so much more than I said to leave some mystery for you and all the other readers.



Anlorew- Yes. The update brings up many questions. As I said above, some of your questions will be answered directly and some will require speculation on your part. You will find out for sure who Willow’s son’s father is and I don’t mean that to be a secret. It’s just that you don’t have a need to know just yet and it will come out in time.

How did Willow and Tara die?
Probably one of the central questions of this story. I’ll tease this. You’ll find out part of the answer to that question in the next update.



How much does Rose know?
Excellent question. Rose knows more than anyone alive in the world knows. She knows all the cookie-cutter pieces and knows basically the whys/wheres/when/whos. She has a few remaining questions and of course wants her evidence.



There won’t be a journal entry for a while and I’m actually trying to stay away from them in general mainly for reasons of readability and pacing. But there will be a few relics in the next update that I think will be quite informative.



Thanks for your comments and questions.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/02/2009

Postby taranwillow4ever » Sat Sep 05, 2009 7:13 am

Wow, loving this. Great way you brought the old one in. Looking forward to reading more.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/02/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Tue Sep 08, 2009 4:57 am

TaranWillow4ever - Thanks for reading and commenting. Yes, this story definitely grew from the first one so I had to include it.

I'm hoping to get the next update posted today.

Thanks.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/02/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Tue Sep 08, 2009 9:57 am

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Story Title – Love comes to LongLick - Revisited

Chapter – 6 – Two Ends

Chapter Rating – PG-13

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“You look like shit, Mac. I didn’t think it was that good a party.” Tip slid into the chair across from her friend and waved the waiter over to ask for a bottle of water. Once she’d ordered her drink and breakfast she returned her attention to the blonde. “Seriously, sweetheart. You look like you got rode hard and put up wet.” She laughed, then added. “I don’t suppose you took video did you?”

Mac glared at her friend. “You know damn well how video can ruin my reputation.”

Tip laughed. “You have a reputation?”

The waiter brought Tip’s water and fruit and she began eating.

“Seriously, I noticed you drove my car to the event.”

Mac laughed. “It’s not your car for five and a half more days and I don’t plan on it ever being your car.”

“On the other hand, I notice you haven’t demanded my phone so you can call your father and make me quit before smashing it on the cobblestones here so I’m guessing your hard riding wet put up night wasn’t courtesy of Marian.”

Mac took a sip of her coffee. “No, my hard riding night was not courtesy of Rose Jennings, formerly known in these parts as Marian the Librarian.”

Tip slapped her leg. “In these parts? Well, howdy pardner. What parts have you acquainted yourself with so far?”

“Wouldn’t you like to know?”

Tip’s smiled fell from her face. “You’re going to tell me, right? What’s the point of this bet if I don’t get to live vicariously through your progress reports?”

The blonde waited for the waiter to refill her coffee. “Of course, sweetie. I’ve met her and ingratiated myself into her life’s passion. How hard could it be from here on out?”

“Ok, details and don’t leave any groping or shoving her up against book shelves out now, Maclay Willingham.”

Mac laughed. “She’s a researcher and she’s cataloging a pile of documents from nearly 150 years ago around the time Sunnydale and Sunnyland were founded. She’s got maps, tax rolls, articles of incorporation and quarterly statements, journals, letters, newspaper clippings, all about my family.”

Tip was silent for a few seconds thinking. “Why does she care so much?”

Mac smiled and nodded. “A good question. What you would say if I told you that my great-great-grandmother—wife to one Ethan Rayne who founded Sunnyland farms – was a big ole dyke?”

“Uh, Mac? Big ole dykes don’t generally marry men who found jelly companies.”

“Well, this one did. I don’t know why but she came out here to be the school teacher in 1871. It seems that she had developed a lack of interest in men back in Philadelphia.”

“Much like someone else at this table,” Tip interrupted.

“Except for the Philadelphia part, yes.” Mac laughed again. “So she comes out here and promptly seduces the town telegraph operator who happens to be Ethan Rayne’s niece.”

“Hot for teacher…” Tip sang out.

“Then she what, leaves the telegraph operator for your great-great and what, squeezes out some babies and lives happily ever after?”

Mac stopped smiling. “Not exactly happily ever after.” She passed two scanned document across the table toward her friend. “Rose lent me some of her research on a data key. By the way, that’s why I’m so tired this morning. After I’d finished with the party and all that…”

“…all that…” Tip airquoted.

“I stayed up late reading.”

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Tip read the clipping before passing it back. “Tragic. What does that have to do you failing to seduce Marian-Rose the researching librarian?”

“Well, Marian-Rose the researching librarian just happens to be the great-great-howevermany-great-grand-daughter of the aforementioned telegraph operator.”

Tip laughed loudly. “Oh, like great-great-grandmother like great-great-daughter.” She pointed at Mac as she guffawed.

Mac waited for her friend to stop laughing which took a few minutes. “I really do mean it’s tragic. I mean she, this Tara Maclay, seemed to really be in love with the telegraph operator. And the telegraph operator was crazy about her. Willow, that’s the telegraph operator, kept a journal and it tells about how they met and fell in love.”

“How sweet.” Tip was being her usual droll self but Mac resisted laughing along with her friend.

“And I’ve read another few months and they are just rolling along, being thrilled with being together and holding hands and reading to each other and watching sunsets. Shit like that.”

Tip snorted. “So they don’t even screw? How in love could they be?”
Mac laughed back at her friend as she pulled her fruit plate toward her and began eating.

“Oh, they ‘screw’ as you put it. They also make love.”

“How touching.”

She set down her fork. “No really. It is touching. I’ve never read anything like it. I mean, they just eat dinner staring at each other and then go outside to sit on the porch and talk and hold hands. And then they’ll just be looking at each other and it’s like they just can’t stand to be two separate people anymore. Like they have to be closer than that.” Seeing that Tip was actually listening, Mac continued. “They like wash each other’s hair down at the creek and bring each other coffee and a hot rock back to bed. For a surprise, Willow will carve Tara a little animal and sometimes Tara surprises Willow by making her cookies or tending the grass on Willow’s parents’s graves.”

Tip squinted at her friend. “You’re softening up on me, Mac. I mean do you want someone to, whatever, wash your hair by the creek and sit on a porch swing with you?”

Mac looked away quickly. “It’s not that… I’m not saying I want to live their lives. It’s just…”

“Just what, Mac?” When Mac didn’t answer Tip pushed farther. “This is me, your best friend. It’s just what?”

Mac took a deep breath. “I’ve never… I’ve never felt anything like that. I mean never. Not for a second. I’ve never thought I felt anything like that.”
“That doesn’t mean you won’t. It just means you haven’t met the right girl yet.”

Mac sipped at her drink. “I hear you. And I want to believe you but maybe she’s not out there. I mean, maybe that right girl… How is she going to find her way through the money?” Tip stared at her looking like she was trying to keep her jaw from banging against the table. “I mean… I’m never going to know if she wants me, loves me, or if she loves the idea of the money or the money itself. And even if she does… even if she truly loves me… how would I meet her?” She shook her head. “Don’t get me wrong. I’m not saying I want to settle down. But what if I can’t even find her? I mean wouldn’t it be ironic. Maclay Willingham, going through life screwing every woman who’s not tied down…”

“And quite a few who were,” Tip interrupted only to catch a glare from her best friend.

“only to find that I can’t find love when I decide I’m ready for love.”

Tip reached out and patted her friend’s hand. “Sweetheart, when you’re ready, you’ll find her and she’ll be perfect and she won’t care about the money or that you’ve screwed half of the debutantes on the continent and a few other continents.” Mac smiled. “And she won’t care that you once lost a bet and had to give your best friend your Escalade.”

The blonde laughed. “I’m thinking about love, Ms. Deluded-Sense-of-Optimism. I’m not joining a convent and losing my bet.”

“Plus, I’m still not convinced that love is all that.”

Mac picked her fork back up. “Well, you may have a point there.”
“Seems like quite a turnaround from a few minutes ago so how so, Captain?”

“Well, this Willow and Tara were madly and sweetly in love but they didn’t stay that way, right? I mean Tara married my great-great-grandfather and churned out some babies and Willow had that kid somehow right? If they couldn’t handle it, what makes me think I could do better?”

Tip shrugged. “I don’t know. Why did they break up?”

Mac swallowed the bite of pineapple she had just speared. “I don’t know. I’ve read most of the first journal and they’re just wonderful. They’re in love and very domestic. Willow’s growing fruits and vegetables and Tara’s some sort of canning fiend. Interspersed into the journal are all these calculations about the number of trees and bushes and the yield per and the grafting she’s doing on certain breeds and how much they yield and the cost of the canning supplies and how many jars of everything Tara’s put up. I think they’re going to have to build another building just to hold the preserves soon.”

“So it’s just them out on the farm?

“So far. They have some friends- one who just got married, the town sheriff, the bartender at the local saloon who hang out with them. The bartender seems to totally get them as a couple, in fact she flirts with both of them shamelessly.”

“Maybe … oh hell. I can’t figure out how people think.”

Mac laughed as Tip set down her fork and reached across to pick up the second sheet of paper. “Ok, now what’s this.” She started reading outloud but stopped after a few lines of reading an article on the front page of the Sunnydale Express dated April 13, 1887:

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Tip set down the clipping. “So, what she’s a spurned lover? She gets drunk and either wanders into the wrong house or breaks in to argue with her ex. The husband comes home and shoots her. She’s like a stalker from history.”

Mac took back the sheet of paper and tucked both into her bag. “I don’t know. I mean that’s one way to see it but I can also tell you that she doesn’t seem like the get drunk and wander into the wrong house type.”

“Well, if she built the thing, maybe she just forgot.”

Mac shook her head. “I don’t think that’s it. Christ. I don’t know. I want to believe that there’s something right here. I want to believe that these two women loved each other until their deaths.”

Tip watched as her friend stood up. “Well, don’t forget the bet, intrepid researcher.” Mac blew her friend a kiss and Tip couldn’t help but shout out. “You can find me by the pool if you want to concede.” She wasn’t surprised to see the classic one finger salute shot backwards over Mac’s shoulder.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby Zampsa1975 » Tue Sep 08, 2009 10:29 am

Yay for great update-y goodness... So the bastard Ethan killed them both...
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby spells42 » Tue Sep 08, 2009 2:04 pm

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You've just dashed my hopes for the deaths of W&T being some kind of hoax to let them disappear to a happy life together. I feel very sad - they should've had a HEA ending.

Ethan's role is very suspicious - and Riley is a twit.

I'm glad the not very likeable Mac is wondering how she's going to find love given her current spoiled rich girl behaviour. I wonder how long it will take before she figures out what Rose is doing, or has her own questions about the history she's learning, and how she will react.

You have, as usual, done a great job of setting the scene and creating 3 dimensional characters to draw us into a story. I'm looking forward to more of your magic.

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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby taranwillow4ever » Wed Sep 09, 2009 4:33 pm

Loving it. I was anxious to know how they both died. Was Tara's fall murder or suicide? It will be interesting to find out.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Sat Sep 12, 2009 6:06 pm

Ok. Well it’s just been 4 days I guess but I have to say that I definitely expected more comments on the articles about both girls’s deaths. But you know what, I’m really enjoying writing this story and I appreciate everyone who reads and everyone who comments and everyone who reads whether you comment or not. Thank you all.

I’ll update in the next few days.

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So the bastard Ethan killed them both...
Hmmm. I’m not answering that completely but I think you see some evidence so far.

Thanks for reading.

Anne – Ah… Yes, a hoax. Like they staged it and ran away or something? Yes, that would have been cool but alas. Yes, they both really died then.

Ethan's role is very suspicious - and Riley is a twit.
Yes and double Yes.

I’m trying to make Mac more likeable but she’s taking a little effort. Honestly, she’s a good person. She’s just damaged by the loss of her mama and sister and by all the money. We’ll see how long it takes her to find out what Rose is doing.

You have, as usual, done a great job of setting the scene and creating 3 dimensional characters to draw us into a story. I'm looking forward to more of your magic.
Thank you so much.

taranwillow4ever – Thanks for commenting. Tara’s fall – good question.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby WrongObsession » Sun Sep 13, 2009 12:43 pm

Hiya! Nice to see another epic is sure on the way. Now for the ritual confusion to commence.

WHAA?!?! What happened to all that is fluffy and rainbows in the world? There is no way Tara would just suddenly decided Willow is not the girl for her! It must be the works of the devious Ethan Ryane! Oh how I'd love to get a good left hook into his jaw. I am saving the right for You Know Who...And how dare he kill both of them! Boy if I ever met him, he'd better prepare for tempest far greater than anything he'd ever face!

I like this bet that Tip made with Mac. Angst is ensued. Rose's attitude will knock Mac off her throne and into a reality where casual sex will seem distant, where sexy librarians rule, and how wonderful life is now that said sexy librarian is in the world.

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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby jay/wt4evr » Mon Sep 14, 2009 5:21 am

Hi Debra, so good to see an update. Also, so good to be able to leave feedback since I didn't have internet til yesterday ^^
When I read it I had to actually restrain myself from blurting out obscenities cuz I was in a public place. That Rayne gives me the wiggins and I got really upset reading about his double murder - obviously cuz I don't think it could have been anyon else {*cough*bastard*cough*}
Faith's speech *was* confusing, and Willow's son? Immaculate conception?
Can't really wait for the story to keep on.
Ah Mac is softening up :) Good that Tip doesn't seem bitchy about her doubts, if you want to call them that.

Hope to see more soon ^^
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby Anlorew » Mon Sep 14, 2009 3:01 pm

Wow. Great update. Those newspaper clippings were really cool looking. They look real. I could never makes something cool like that :blush Anyways, I really love the update. I was practically bouncing in my seat, and I nearly hit my computer when I read about stupid Rayne. So I'm guessing he's responsible for both of their deaths. Poor Tara, to have to be with Rayne and then watch him shoot Willow right in front of her. I suppose I could see Tara killing herself after Willow died, if Rayne isn't directly responsible for her death. But still, I really dislike him. And it doesn't help any that he didn't get what was coming for him but instead got all rich and left a huge legacy behind...at least Mac is showing an interest in the whole thing. That made me happy. I'm starting to see subtle changes in her (or at least I'm seeing a different side of her) and I like it. I am still incredibly curious as to how much Willow knows, and what her intentions are with the knowledge she's obtained...I can't wait for more!!
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Thu Sep 17, 2009 4:04 pm

WrongObsession – Hello. I’m hoping this won’t be that epic. I’m hoping for more of a novella that I’ll get written and finished and then move back to my other in-progresses but yes and welcome.

WHAA?!?! What happened to all that is fluffy and rainbows in the world?
Excellent questions. Well, about 140 years passed…

I’d say your suspicions about Ethan Rayne are probably right on target. More will be revealed about all this as the story goes along. Actually, I guess it kind of is the story.

Re: the bet. I’m glad you like it. It’s an old plot device but it’s getting me into the real story.

Thanks so much.

jay/wt4evr Well congrats for getting your internet back. It’s shocking how much not having it can just throw us off, isn’t it? I’m glad you avoided the embarrassment or worse of shouting obscenities at the screen. Rayne is wiggins-worthy for sure. I’m not sure that it’s a double murder if you don’t kill the people at the same time but I hear your sentiment.

Faith's speech *was* confusing, and Willow's son? Immaculate conception?
Faith generally had a point in her speech but I’m not sure that those who should have made good did. Acutally, I can tell you that they didn’t make good which is what leads to this entire story. Tee hee. No. Willow’s son is not an immaculate conception. There’s not a good explanation for his existance but there is an explanation. It’s quite a few updates away, unfortunately.

Mac is most definitely softening up and Tip, while skanky and rich and snobby, does care for Mac enough to also be a good sounding board.

Update coming up right now…

Thanks for reading.

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Those newspaper clippings were really cool looking. They look real. I could never makes something cool like that
All the credit goes to Chris. I don’t have any idea how to do it and I’m not calling upon him in this chapter mostly because I don’t want to bug him.

I’m glad you loved the udpate and even that you were so mad about Ethan. I think everyone is guessing that he’s responsible for Tara’s death. I won’t say but you can make guesses.
Poor Tara, to have to be with Rayne and then watch him shoot Willow right in front of her.
Yeah, I’d say that part would really, really suck. Especially given that she lived another 3 weeks.

And it doesn't help any that he didn't get what was coming for him but instead got all rich and left a huge legacy behind..
Sometimes it goes like that.

I’m glad the subtle Mac changes are coming through. She is definitely changing for the better.

I am still incredibly curious as to how much Willow knows, and what her intentions are with the knowledge she's obtained.
I’m assuming you really mean Rose here and she knows quite a bit which will be revealed as the story goes along. And you’ll also learn what she wants from the Willinghams.

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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/08/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Thu Sep 17, 2009 4:26 pm

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Story Title – Love comes to LongLick Revisted

Chapter – 7 – And Then

Chapter Rating – G

Author, Pairing, Feedback, Spoilers, Distribution, Disclaimer – see chapter 1.

Note – I’d like to have a newspaper clipping in this one but it didn’t work out. If I get it, I’ll edit this version.

Note - Thanks again to Chris.

Mac greeted the security guard as she entered the library and glanced at the clock over the main circulation desk. 10:00. Oh well, she was interested in this whole mystery and was damn sure interested in winning the bet but that didn’t mean she was a different person. Plus, she’d been out half the night at that fundraiser thing, up another half the night with … other activities, and up the third half of the night reading the documents Rose had allowed her to take with when she left the library.

Rose.

The woman was a complete mystery to Mac and Mac considered herself somewhat a student of human behavior. She’d always considered reading people to be somewhat of an “occupational” requirement. Of course, her occupation involved schools, alcohol, adventure, looking beautiful, meeting beautiful women. Still, she felt that she’d developed a sort of sixth sense about people.

But she hadn’t figured the redhead in the basement out just yet. Yes, she was clearly the classic nerd. And Mac felt pretty sure that she was gay by the way she’d responded so uncomfortably when Mac had stroked her hand the day before plus the look she got on her face when Mac had called her cute. But there was something reserved, almost resentful about the other woman’s attitude. Mac wondered if they had met years before. Had she delivered some sort of slight to Rose or her family?

Mac took the time to go over to room just off the main area, the one housing the Sunnydale history documents. The room was about four times larger than the one Rose worked in down in the basement. A sizable plaque by the entryway declared the room to be funded by the generosity of the Willingham family. She slowly looked through the documents in glass cases and on pedestals, seeing various maps of the area, the first few completed by Ira and then Willow Rosenberg and later ones completed by an employee of Sunnyland Farms. They demonstrated the growth of industry in the area as initial maps showed no city center, then a few houses, a saloon, a general store, the town jail. Later maps showed more houses, additional stores, another saloon and hotel. By the mid 1920s the first of the Sunnyland factories began to appear on the maps. She ran her finger along the glass to find her family home, a home in which she hadn’t set foot in over thirteen years. Construction had begun in 1881 and been completed in 1883. Then she caught her eye on a small square just West of the mansion, labeled “Rosenberg/Maclay.”

She felt like she’d taken a hit to the solar plexus. That little hut that stood less than a mile from family house was the home about which Willow had so romantically presented Tara the flag on their first Christmas together? She remembered going on walks with her mother as a little girl and asking what the decrepit building was. Her mother had told her that it was an historic building, a tour stop for people coming to see the Rayne/Willingham home and shops. The dosents led tour groups into the small space explaining that this was the first home of Tara Maclay Rayne, wife of Sunnyland Farms founder Ethan Rayne, in Sunnydale -- that it was the location where she had created so many of her recipies for award winning preserves. As a child Mac had thought the building was an eyesore and asked why it couldn’t be torn down and her mother had explained that another family refused to sell the building or the land immediately around it although they had slowly sold every other bit of land they owned to the Sunnyland Farms over the years. An agreement was reached in the 1960s by which Sunnyland farms leased the building and land paying an annual stipend to the family and using it for tours.

She pointed to the building and leaned closer to the glass finally making out the caption on the latest map. “Rosenberg family home – leased to Sunnyland Farms.”

Mac stood in front of the case thinking for a long time before moving to the next case. The next cases held sheets of paper with ingredient lists and other markings. They appeared to be Tara Maclay’s first efforts at writing down the recipes for her preserves. The heiress again felt that punch to the gut as she recognized notations on each recipe in the hand she recognized from the journals. There could be no doubting that Willow had been integrally involved in the recipes yet each one showed just the initials T.M. or a few T.M.R. at the bottom. Some showed small drawings of cherries or apples or peaches as appropriate and Mac wondered which woman was the artist.

After a little while longer perusing the contents of the room, Mac glanced at her watch to find that time had flown and it was already 12:15. Assuming that Rose was a creature of habit, she would not be back for another hour. Mac decided to go eat a light lunch and return shortly for the afternoon.

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Rose finished her daily apple sitting on the steps as she always did. She hadn’t been surprised that her visitor of yesterday was not around this morning and had found the morning quite productive. True, she had not found any documents proving her claim but the history of Sunnydale and the Sunnyland Farms corporation was fascinating.

She had been back at work in her research room for only about ten minutes when she heard a light knock at the door. The redhead quickly stood and crossed the room to open the door.

“H-hi.”

“Hi?” Rose waited for her visitor to say something further but instead the woman smoothly entered the room and set the data key on the table.
“I hope you don’t mind a visitor for another day.”

Rose shrugged again. “Like I said yesterday, you’re paying the grant so help yourself.”

Mac took a seat at the table in the same chair she’d taken the day before. “This is… “

Rose joined her visitor at the table. “is…?”

Mac pushed the data key toward Rose. “It’s … I don’t know. Amazing. Beautiful. Romantic. Tragic. I’ve never read anything like this. I mean Willow’s just… she’s totally head-over-heels in love.”

Rose smiled as she remembered her initial feelings when she’d first read the journal. Her ancestor was completely uninhibited about recording her feelings and experiences. She’d had no idea that more than a hundred years later someone would be reading what she’d recorded and she seemed to have no embarrassment about her most intimate experiences. Reading her writings was romantic and refreshing. “Yes.”

Mac bit at her lip. “But something happened. I mean this journal,” she tapped the key. “This journal is all domestic bliss.” Rose nodded her head and pulled off her gloves. “Yet, sometime later her lover married my 3GF and became my 3GM and Willow had a child of her own or adopted or something. What happened?”

Rose chuckled. “Well, first off, if your 3GM, as you’re calling her hadn’t married your 3GF, neither you nor I would be sitting here.”

“Point taken.”

Rose shrugged. “Do you really want to know? I mean maybe you’d rather take this data key,” she pushed the key toward the heiress, “back to your hotel and just read that part over and over.”

Mac leaned closer to the redhead. “Would you be willing to walk me through the story? Show the documents?” She ran her hand along the other girl’s arm. “You could be my personal guide.”

Rose shut her eyes. Jesus. Television and magazine pictures absolutely did not do this woman justice. She exuded sensuality and it was no wonder that she’d been so … romantically prolific. Rose swallowed pointedly and looked at her laptop. “Sure. Take a look at this one.” She keyed in a few commands and navigated a document menu to bring up document she desired then turned the computer screen so her visitor could look at the, by now familiar heading of the Sunnydale Express, and the small item below that.

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Mac shook her head. “This can’t be right. I mean how did they go from …” she tapped her hand on the plastic-wrapped journal “to …” next she pointed toward the computer screen.

Rose studied her visitor closely. She seemed upset about what she was reading, almost as if she were taking it personally. Finally she reached out and took the other woman’s hand in her own. “I have to tell you that I don’t even have all the answers. I have a lot of information but I don’t know everything that happened. The how, as you put it, is still somewhat confusing to me.” Mac nodded and Rose continued. “If you have a few days the best thing is probably to just continue moving through the documents in chronological order.”

Mac looked down at their hands and rubbed her thumb softly along the back of the other woman’s hand as she nodded. “I have all the time in the world but I don’t want to interfere with your work.”

Rose smiled as she motioned toward the computer and the boxes stacked against the wall. “I think that I can probably get a little work done even while you’re reading and I can show you some other documents as well.” She was having a little difficulty speaking as she felt the intensity of sexual energy Mac seemed to be intentionally sending through their linked hands and right to Rose’s core. Regrettably she pulled her hand away and pulled the computer toward her to navigate to a few documents. “Ok, I’ve pulled up the second of Willow’s journals. Wherever you see this icon…” she hovered the cursor over the blip on the screen, “there is a linked document – either a tax record or a drawing or sometimes letters from Tara Maclay to her family out East.”

Mac listened closely to the instructions. “How did you get letters from Tara Maclay to her family?”

Nodding Rose explained. “Her old governess Jenny Calendar remained a close friend of Tara’s until Tara’s death. Jenny and Tara’s brother, Donald Maclay, traveled together to bring Tara her mother’s wedding dress. He had been married and was widowed and the two of them married shortly after returning to Philadelphia. One of their grandchildren found the letters in an attic box with a note from Jenny Calendar/Maclay asking that they be returned to Tara Maclay. They were sent to your family home addressed to ‘The Estate of Tara Maclay.’”

“Wow. Really?”

Rose shrugged. “It’s actually not that unusual an occurrence. Back when people wrote letters people would save them and then return them after someone’s death.”

“Huh. I never knew that.”

Rose just shrugged and nodded her head again. “Ok, why don’t you start with the next journal? The first entry is from July 4, 1872.” She pushed the computer toward the other woman and then asked if she needed any further assistance. She waited a moment and then saw that Mac seemed to be intently reading the document before pulling on her gloves and returning to her task of extricating and logging the documents in the box on the floor.

The afternoon passed quickly for the two women as they worked together yet separately in the small room. A few times Rose glanced at her visitor and almost laughed at the look on Mac’s face as she read some of the intimate details of Willow and Tara’s life together.

Mac read and reread a letter from Tara to her governess. “I don’t remember reading any of these in the documents you gave me yesterday but it’s beautiful.”

Rose turned and smiled. “Which letter is it?”

"It’s dated July 10, 1872 and addressed to Jenny Calendar of Philadelphia, PA:"

[blockquote] “Dear Miss Calendar,
I enjoyed your most recent letter. It sounds like your new charge is quite well-behaved but perhaps not as stimulating as your past charges. Yes, I refer to myself in this and I am aware that I might have presented you with uncomfortable challenges during our years together. Please know that I recognize these challenges and regret them terribly. At the same time, I’m so grateful for your perseverance in all matters. Now that I am a teacher, myself, I can only imagine the fits I must have given you.

Our weather is simply quite temperate, more comfortably so than I could have imagined of California. I suppose that further South the weather becomes unseasonable but in this part of the state, we feel a cool breeze every evening and most afternoons as well. On July 4, we gathered North of town to view a display of fireworks, watch a performance on the founding of the States, and finally dance. I admit that I much prefer the custom here, made necessity at times by the uneven numbers of men and women dancing, to dance with partners of both persuasions. It allows me to dance with various friends and most especially my Willow.

My Willow … I do not know what to say about her except that her tenderness and companionship fulfill me as I never knew possible. At times it seems that she knows my needs and wishes before I can even know them myself. We live rather a simple life compared to my rearing and I would have no other. I have found myself to have rather a gift for canning. I hope to win blue ribbons at the Fall fair as Willow has done year after year for many of her produce offerings. I sometimes think she must go out in the night and bewitch her plants to cause them to grow so large and sweet.

I feel that our home has more of a woman’s touch than it did when I arrived for Willow had lived here nearly 18 years with only her father and later by herself. My Spring cleaning attack seemed to frighten my lovely redhead from the very grounds for a day or more. She blanched visibly when I informed her that I would be repeating my efforts annually.

I will take a few paragraphs to continue to depict the population of the town. I know that I’ve described our friends Faith Lehane, Sheriff Alexander Harris, and Mrs. Joyce Summers.

The owner of the general store is a man named Ethan Rayne and Willow tells me that he is her uncle although I cannot detect any familial resemblance nor warmth between the two. It seems that he was against Willow’s parents (Ethan’s sister) marrying, feeling that she was marrying below her station, and the tension has lasted many years. Three separate residents have pulled me aside to warn me with implications of his behavior toward single women but I have experienced no untoward behavior in my visits to his store. He seems quite congenial and polite in my interactions with him and always agrees to return with books for Willow or for the school when we request such delivery after his frequent visits to San Francisco.

Mrs. Summers has three daughters: Buffy who recently married a young man named Riley Finn. I can’t say much about Mr. Finn as I’ve rarely interacted with him and when I have, he seems to speak only about himself. Perhaps given that he only concentrates on himself, I should know about him but I don’t feel I do. The younger daughter is an intelligent but somewhat ill-mannered child named Dawn. She is the most advanced student in my school but also displays a negative attitude a great deal of the time. The third daughter, Emms, is my youngest student and I gather that she is not naturally a Summers but has been adopted by the family.

I can’t say how this came to be and fear asking for revealing my fondest wish of having children of my own. Willow has a love of Emms and all the children of this town and I can only expect that she would set about to contrive a child of our own if I let on my interest. Perhaps this is what keeps me from discussing it with her for I do not feel ready to let go of our evenings and mornings alone just yet.

Willow will be home from town soon so I need to finish this missive. School sessions will begin after the Fall harvest is complete but I have other tasks I want to complete between now and then. I cannot express how fervently I desire a visit from you. Mrs. Richard (Cordelia) Wilkins has extended an invitation for you to stay at her lovely home in the center of town when you arrive. In spite of the ferocity of my wish to see you, I must reiterate the importance of a chaperon for your travels. I now see that my own journey was foolishly undertaken and I was fortunate to arrive safely and honorably at my destination. I would wish no similar adventure on you nor do I plan to attempt such a thing again.

I enclose once again a list of items I find simply impossible to find here and will impose on your goodwill to send them at your convenience.

When you do so, simply let me know the cost and my Willow will send that amount along the wire to you.

Willow now arrives and kissing my cheek sends her greetings to you.
Missing you,

Tara Maclay
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Rose nodded. “I only came across the letters last week and I haven’t embedded all the links into all of the journals. They’re in this one though so you’ll get to read them.”

Mac smiled at the redhead. “This is just so… I don’t know. I don’t know how to describe this except it’s unreal.” She took a breath and seemed about to say something else when her phone chimed on the table.

“Sorry, that’s a text from my father’s secretary. I need to answer it.”

“Do you want me to leave you alone?”

Mac shook her head as she read over the message. “Crap.” She quickly tapped out a response and set the phone back on the table. “He just requested my attendance at this charity thing tonight. I was going to meet with my personal trainer but now …”

Rose laughed out loud. “I don’t want this to sound wrong but everyone should have such problems.”

Mac’s laughter showed her agreement. “Come with me.”

“Yeah, right.”

Mac reached out for Rose’s hand before drawing back when she realized the girl was still wearing her gloves. She instead touched the girl’s forearm. “I’m totally serious, Rose. I’d really love it if you would come with me tonight. I promise it will be an interesting set of people and the food will be delicious.” She looked at the computer for a moment before adding. “And I’d … I’d really like it if you came with me.” Rose studied the heiress intently trying to figure out her game but didn’t respond. “I mean… unless you have … you know, other plans? Some hulking boyfriend or tae-bo instructor girlfriend waiting for you to get done at the library…”

Rose shook her head with a smile. “No hulking anyone unless you count my grandmother who can be quite formidable.”

Mac smiled. “Then come with me. I promise a very fun time and we can have you home… as early as you’d like.” She licked her lips. “Or as late.”

Rose chuckled. “I really couldn’t. I mean… It’s a nice offer and idea but look at me.” She motioned toward her outfit. “I don’t think I would really fit in at some sort of society thing and I probably would eat the soup with the wrong fork or something.”

Mac still didn’t let go her hold on the other girl but leaned closer to whisper in her ear. “I could give you pointers. Like for example, you don’t eat soup with a fork.”

“See, I’d never fit in.”

Mac shook her head in frustration. “You could make me crazy, Rose Jennings.”

Rose stood up and moved over toward the boxes on the floor. “That’s possible, Maclay Willingham.”

“What about tomorrow night? I’ll tell Trent that I’m not doing any society thing tomorrow night. I’d like to take you to dinner. Or another night if you want.”

Rose considered for a few moments. “So you’re coming back tomorrow?”

“Oh, most definitely.”

Rose shrugged non-committally. “We’ll see then.”

Mac laughed. “Hard-to-get. I like that.”

Rose watched the other woman for a few seconds before returning her attention to the documents. Oh Jesus. No wonder she had cut such a wide swath through the women of America and a few other countries. It was something about those eyes. Who could resist them? They sparkled in a way that promised the night or few best nights of your life. And it wasn’t like there was anything wrong with Rose Jennings having a little fun.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby WrongObsession » Thu Sep 17, 2009 9:22 pm

You presented me with the perfect excuse to not do school work. I thank you.

Wow I kind of feel honored commenting first. =]

This whole Rayne/Maclay thing is killing me! I guess I can see a plot unfolding where Ethan is threatening Willow and Tara being the passionate person she is marries Ethan. But why put Willow through the pain of knowing and leaving? And if anything why not just get Faith and Xander to kick some ass? Not like Ethan could do anything but be a pansy. *sigh* No wonder I am not Sherlock Holmes. Guess I'll just stick to FBI profiling.

The letter added just the right touch. 1/3 heartfelt, 1/3 authenticity, 1/3 confusion. I am right with Mac, WTF happened.

Oh a date? I like dates. They lead to puppies and all around giddiness.

Can't wait for the next update.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby Zampsa1975 » Fri Sep 18, 2009 2:53 am

Yay for great update-y goodness... My theory for how Tara ended marrying the bastard is that the bastard somehow threatened to take Willow's land unless Tara marries him... I hope that Rose's & Mac's date leads to more than just a fun one-night-stand...
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby taranwillow4ever » Fri Sep 18, 2009 1:15 pm

Love the update. I was so happy when I saw it. I too want to know what happened to make Tara marry. I fear angst and possible violence?
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby hereinmyhead » Sat Sep 19, 2009 9:09 pm

Oh, dear. My de-lurking could be a sign of the apocalypse. Either way, I just wanted to say that I’m so excited that you’re continuing “Love Comes to Long Lick.” Which was a ton of fun to read, as are all your stories. So Yay!
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby love_2003 » Sat Sep 19, 2009 11:43 pm

Love the story so far. I don't think Willow getting shot was just an accident and Tara having to marry Ethan. Hopefully the truth will eventually come out. I'm looking forward to see Rose going out.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby spells42 » Sun Sep 20, 2009 5:31 am

I was so happy to see an update.

It was a nice little interlude between Rose and Mac, revealing a little more about each of them. I like that Rose is aware of Mac's ploys and is attracted to her, but isn't falling at her feet overwhelmed at the attention. She's not the little mouse of a librarian she seems to Tip and Mac.

The letter by Tara was interesting, but didn't give any big clues that I detected.. In fact it was all really confusing, Jenny and Donnie came for the wedding, but apparently Jenny at least was quite aware of her relationship with Willow.

Looking forward to finding out
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby Alcy » Mon Sep 21, 2009 7:25 pm

Hiya Deb, I promised I would drop by and here I am! Although I must apologise profusely for having missed 7 chapters!

I must say that I do have the hots for womanising, bad-arse Mac...although the fact that she ran over, and killed, a dog in Belgium is a serious mark against her! I’m not quite sure if there is anything she can do to make up for such a serious crime in my books. And she called Willow a ‘dumb-hick’. That and she reminds me a little of a Paris Hilton-ish socialite.

Rose is really quite sad. While I admire her dedication to her research, sitting around with your nana, playing Jeopardy isn’t exactly how I’d want to spend my days.

I admire Mac’s willingness to go to great lengths to win her bet with Tip, suddenly diving headfirst into an archivist’s paradise isn’t exactly what normal people would do to win someone over.

I love the use of a journal, you know how much I like diary entries and what-not. They always give you such an expanded scope for story-telling. Plus Willow’s vernacular is really cute and the fact that she is a telegraph operator is just perfect. At the forefront of cutting edge of technology in the Old West.

And the story is also a mystery. Although we’re really interested in our two girls, it’s also like uncovering the history of a whole town. Which to someone like me who does love research, it is fascinating. As Mac is uncovering the mystery, and the lives of Willow and Tara, she’s softening and struggling to understand that such a love could exist. It’s really fascinating…and more than a little heartbreaking. Tara falls down the stairs and Willow gets shot three times by Tara’s husband…honestly Deb, and I thought I was hard on our girls! I’m really looking forward to uncovering more of this story. The most burning question in my mind is why the hell did Tara marry Ethan Rayne! I know you’re going to answer it in the course of the story so I’ll uncover the story bit by bit.

Mac really looks like she’s going to win her wager with tip. I can’t quite see how Rose is going to resist her charms, and by the end of the latest chapter, she hasn’t done much resisting at all!

Thanks very much Deb, and I look forward to contributing with each new chapter.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Tue Sep 22, 2009 3:03 pm

Ok. Comments. I’m writing a bit slower so the next updates will be longer between. Sorry for that.

WrongObsession – Well, you’re welcome for the excuse but get right back when you’re done here. Tee hee. Did that sound authoritative?

Wow I kind of feel honored commenting first. =]
– Generally called ‘dibs’.

This whole Rayne/Maclay thing is killing me! I guess I can see a plot unfolding where Ethan is threatening Willow and Tara being the passionate person she is marries Ethan.
I’m fascinated at how many people are speculating things like this. I can promise that there’s no direct threat involved. And I can also say that Ethan is very much behind it all.

The letter added just the right touch. 1/3 heartfelt, 1/3 authenticity, 1/3 confusion. I am right with Mac, WTF happened.
Thanks. It was fun to write something that I tried to do in Tara’s voice rather than Willow’s. There will be more from each of them, particularly in the next few years of story (their story) so hopefully their voices are distinct.

We’ll see about that date…

Thanks for commenting. Again.

Zampsa1975 – Hey there. Thanks for reading and commenting. Good theory. Re: date > one-night stand. We’ll see about that…

Thanks.

taranwillow4ever – Yes, everyone wants to know what happened with Tara that she would marry Rayne. It’s a very good question and one that will definitely be answered in a while. Thanks.

hereinmyhead – Hi and welcome to the Kitten Board!

My de-lurking could be a sign of the apocalypse.
Again, welcome.

Thanks a lot.

love_2003 – Oh, I can promise that Willow getting shot was no accident. Hmmm. Maybe I shouldn’t say that. Perhaps I should leave some mystery… No. I think there’s enough mystery. It was not an accident.

Thanks for commenting.

Anne – Well, thanks. Rose is quite aware that Mac’s not to be trusted but she doesn’t know exactly why. Let’s just say that they are both seeking very different things and don’t really understand the other’s motivations. Yes, Tara’s letter is a bit confusing if seen from the point in time of 10+ years later when Tara marries Ethan. I’d say that Jenny knew of Tara’s relationship but you can expect that Tara, being brought up much more ladylike than Willow, wouldn’t put any details about it in her letters to Jenny. It would be sort of a more “understood” comfort than any explicit sexual thing.

Alcy – Oh boy. I’m excited and distressed to see you here at the same time. I’m quite sure that I’ll make 100 mistakes in how to handle old documents and what librarians or researchers and whether they had flush toilets and where Willow and Tara would have charged their IPhones. But at the same time, I’m thrilled to see you here. Thanks for reading.

I must say that I do have the hots for womanising, bad-arse Mac..
Yeah. I kind of thought of your assortment of Willow’s this morning when I was thinking about Mac. She’s incorrigible. Agreed about the dog. I actually thought a little of Paris Hilton when writing her but in a less stupid way.

Rose is really quite sad. While I admire her dedication to her research, sitting around with your nana, playing Jeopardy isn’t exactly how I’d want to spend my days.
Hmmm. Interesting assessment. I guess I think that right now she’s simply very focused on her goal. She doesn’t really look very far past getting what she deserves. But, yeah she should get a bit of a life.

I love the use of a journal, you know how much I like diary entries and what-not. They always give you such an expanded scope for story-telling.
It’s a really fun device for sure. The hardest thing is to figure out how to include multiple clips into the narrative. Like, does Mac say, “well there’s this…” and “and then there’s this…”

Plus Willow’s vernacular is really cute and the fact that she is a telegraph operator is just perfect. At the forefront of cutting edge of technology in the Old West.
Yes, and a woman in an obvoiously more male-dominated field as well.

I agree that the story is a mystery and I’m hoping a good one. It’s certainly the history of the town which kind of grew around and because of these two random women. What if that’s really the way history works? What if there’s a minor but central figure in small towns who doesn’t show up in history books but who totally is the focus of the town? A shopkeeper or a traveling salesman or a midwife?

As Mac is uncovering the mystery, and the lives of Willow and Tara, she’s softening and struggling to understand that such a love could exist.
Well put. She’s very much softening but its’ taking a completely unjaded narrative to get her to do so. The irony is that she’s reading an unjaded narrative from someone who was ultimately murdered at 34 years of age and died poor and alone. Geez. Now I bummed myself out.

Tara falls down the stairs and Willow gets shot three times by Tara’s husband…honestly Deb, and I thought I was hard on our girls!
On the other hand, it’s not like they could be alive today no matter what happened…

[qutoe] The most burning question in my mind is why the hell did Tara marry Ethan Rayne! I know you’re going to answer it in the course of the story so I’ll uncover the story bit by bit. [/quote]So many people are clamoring for this answer that I’m almost afraid no one will be satisfied by the answer when it comes.

Mac really looks like she’s going to win her wager with tip. I can’t quite see how Rose is going to resist her charms, and by the end of the latest chapter, she hasn’t done much resisting at all!
Good guess.

Thanks for reading!
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/17/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Thu Sep 24, 2009 3:12 pm

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Story Title – Love comes to Long Lick Revisted
Chapter – 8 – In which the Plot, as they say, Thickens a bit.
Chapter Rating – G
Author, Pairing, Feedback, Spoilers, Distribution, Disclaimer – see chapter 1.
For the first time in as long as she could remember, Maclay Willingham woke before her alarm went off. She lay in the bed staring at the ceiling pondering this discovery and realized that one reason this event was so rare was that she rarely set an alarm, having no destination important enough to curtail her partying. And curtail she had. She shook her head as she remembered leaving the charity function alone, something she could not remember having done in years. Damn that Rose Jennings and damn Sunnydale and damn Willow Rosenberg and Tara Maclay for good measure. She had found herself sitting between a senator and the owner of a major league baseball team and realized repeatedly she was not listening nor contributing to the conversation at all. She was daydreaming about the world she had so recently entered through the documents at the library.

After a glance at the clock, she called her personal trainer to arrange to meet 20 minutes later in the gym. Of course another client couldn’t call on such short notice but Mac was well aware that this was just how doors worked for her. It might as well work in her favor. By 8:30 she sat in the café eating a breakfast of toast, egg whites, and fruit with coffee and bottled water.

“Oh my God, Mac. You’re turning into a fucking librarian.” Tip slid into the chair across from her friend and looked her up and down.

Mac stared at her friend for a moment, realizing that the girl was clearly wearing the same clothes from the night before. “Good morning to you too.”

“You didn’t even take anyone home from the thing last night! You know that the women at those things are always totally wild.” She reached across and began to flick her friend on the forehead. “Are you even there? I mean you’re not going soft on me are you?”

Mac laughed. “You’re the one who wanted me to bed Marian the librarian.”

Tip shook her head. “Yes, but I didn’t think you’d turn into a fucking librarian. I thought you’d either nail her or fail to nail her and still party with me. This town is going to be incredibly boring if you go on like this.”

The blonde leaned across the table. “You want to know something crazy?”

“Oh Jesus.” Tip rested her head in her hands.

“I like her, Tip. I mean… like like.”

“Right, I got like like.” Tip shook her head. “What do you want me to do? Bring a fucking soup tureen to your wedding?”

Mac laughed. “She’s not like the women I usually meet.”

Tip ordered her breakfast and then answered. “Sure, cause usually the women you meet are rich and beautiful and totally not boring.”

Mac shot her friend a look that clearly said cool it. “I think she’s totally cute and if she wasn’t sitting in the basement of a library in jeans and a faded shirt she could be beautiful.”

“And rich?”

“Well no, she’s not rich. But you know what? I invited her to come with me last night…”

She was interrupted by her friend. “I bet. Or after, before, whatever…”

Mac spoke louder. “But she turned me down. Said that she didn’t have the right clothes, which between you and me is no doubt quite true.”

Tip scoffed. “Great she’s poor but she knows she’s poor. How about you fail to nail her and give me your damn car?”

“My point is that she didn’t drop a hint like she wanted me to buy her new clothes or something. She just said no.”

Tip shrugged. “Ok, so she’s doing better than Virginia on that.”

Mac smiled. “Plus she does have that fresh, virginal vibe going for her.”

Tip nodded. “If your brain ever moves above your belly-button, let me know. Actually, on second thought, I don’t think I want to know.”

“Oh, I don’t think I’m in a lot of danger on that one,” Mac tried to comfort her best friend. “She’s just… interesting to me. She’s very passionate.”

“They all are,” Tip argued. “That’s why your dad got that extra layer of insulation installed between your suites and his I thought.”

Mac allowed herself a smile at her friend’s one-track mind and one-track mouth. “As I was saying. She’s very passionate about her research and about this whole story with Willow Rosenberg and Tara Maclay. It’s like they are real people to her. Almost like her friends. But she’s …” She let it hang there.


“She’s…? Don’t leave me hanging here, Maclay.”

“It’s almost like she’s on a mission. Like she’s playing search and destroy of intrepid adventurer or something. Indiana Jones and the basement library room.”

Tip chuckled at her friend. “Sure, Marian the Librarian finds the cure for the common cold in the basement of the Sunnydale library.” She took another few bites of her breakfast. “And how goes the saga of your great-grand-dyke or whatever?”

Mac smiled at her friend. “Well, I’ve read a few more years and it’s still all hugs and puppies. The two of them live out on this farm that Willow’s dad settled which by the way their cabin sits next to the Willingham mansion. I remember seeing it as a child and thought it was an eyesore. Willow runs the post and telegraph office and still likes cartography and growing fruit trees and other vegetables. Tara’s the local school teacher, county champion at preserves, and quite a hand at quilting apparently. And no one seems to have any problem with their relationship.” She took a sip of her drink. “I’m not saying that people are going to throw them a wedding shower but most people seem to just think they’re two young women living together for companionship or whatever.”

Tip rolled her eyes. “Very sweet. It’s a wonder you keep from throwing up.”

“Hey, it’s kind of hot sometimes. I mean this woman was just a kid writing all the details of their intimate life. I don’t think she had any understanding that anyone would read it or anything. So it’s totally raw and bare.”

“Nice.”

Mac nodded. “And then there are some notations I’m not sure I understand but I bet Rose does.” She looked at the clock on her phone. “Speaking of which, I’m sure you can call my father soon to turn in your resignation.” She blew her friend a kiss and headed across the street.

Rose had mentioned that the security guard’s name was Joey so Mac greeted him by name this morning and noticed that he looked as smitten as his sort ever did, jumping off his chair to ask if he could help her. A few minutes later she knocked on the door to the research room and entered. The redhead smiled at her as she came in and set down her computer. “Good morning. Did you have a good time last night?”

Mac smiled back. “Not as good as I would have with you but I think I made a showing.”

“Are you thinking of applying for a grant as a researcher?” Rose pointed to the computer Mac now began pulling from her bag.

“No but I thought it might be helpful and free up your computer for your own use.”

Rose nodded. “Nice thought. Why don’t you continue with my computer since all the documentation is loaded on it and if I need it, we can work something out?”

With a shrug, Mac sat down in front of the computer which was already showing the latest journal she’d been reading when she left the day before. “Before you dive into that dusty box, can you help me out with something?”

Rose slid into the chair next to her visitor and nodded. “Sure.”

Mac scrolled for a moment before pointing to some numbers printed in rows in the journal pages. “What is this?”

Rose began to chuckle. “Ah, the first of the Willowy mysteries.” She stood up and walked across the room to where she pulled a few sheets in plastic wrap from a file cabinet and brought them back to the table. “So a few years have gone by since they met right?”

“Sure. They’re living in domestic lesbionic bliss.”

“Right. Well, Tara’s preserves are really good and you read that she wanted to take them to Ethan Rayne to sell in his store right?” Mac nodded. “Well the locals didn’t buy much because even though Willow has more and better fruit than anyone else, they all do canning as well. But then he suggested that he take them up to San Francisco on his bi-monthly visits or to other cities.”

“I read that.”

“Of course. Ok. Willow and Tara are starting to make quite a bit of money as is Mr. Rayne.”

“Good for them.”

“Right. Now you might ask yourself, if you’re a, as you’ve called her, ‘dumb, hick country girl’ what do you do with the money you’re shoving under the floorboards and hiding in pails out in the barn?”

Mac thought about it. “Put it in the bank and those are account numbers?”

Rose laughed. “Good guess but not quite. Well, actually she’s doing that somewhat as well.” She pulled a map near her. “This one took quite a bit of cross-referencing. She’s buying up land. Mostly 10-20 acre lots.”

Mac looked at the maps seeing that on each one showed more and more shaded with numbers and dates. She looked back to the computer and checked the numbers and dates against the journal. “Why the code though?”

Rose laughed again and this time Mac thought the laugh was a cruel one rather than an amused one. “Because Willow Rosenberg was a true romantic. She was in the deepest love. She put it all in code so that Tara wouldn’t know what she was doing. Their first Christmas she gave Tara the flag with both names on it, right?” Mac nodded. “The second Christmas she gave her the side-saddle, a silk shawl, and 67 acres of prime farmland in Tara’s sole name. Oh, and she managed to plant most of the acres as well.”

“In Tara’s sole name?”

Rose stood and walked away for a minute as Mac waited. When she turned back Mac could see tears in the girl’s eyes. She wiped at them as if embarrassed. “It started as a romantic gesture. Then became a running joke between them. Each year for Christmas, no matter what else they exchanged, Willow would give Tara the titles to whatever land she bought during the year. In later journals she refers to the tradition.”

“Did she buy any for herself?”

Rose nodded. “She increased the acreage on her father’s land from the original 160 acres to 462 eventually.”

Uncomfortable for some reason with the discussion, Mac looked away and studied the map. “What are these other segments?”

The redhead laughed again. “Those were easier to track down. It seems that one other resident of Sunnydale was buying up land.”

“Ethan Rayne?”

“See, we’ll make you a researcher yet.”

Mac nodded. “Ok, thanks for clearing that up.” She turned back toward the computer and read until lunch time. She attempted to get Rose to commit to going out to dinner but the redhead said that it wasn’t a good night with a smile and went back to cataloging documents. On one hand, Mac felt totally frustrated but on the other, it had been quite a while since a woman had put up any resistance and she was having a fun week having to work at bedding the researcher.

After the redhead had left, Mac decided to get some lunch so she left as well. When she returned Rose was already scanning documents into her computer. “This will take a few minutes. Why don’t you bring me up to speed on what you’ve read this morning?”

Mac took a seat and pushed away from the table to take a position affording her a view of the other girl’s ass. She was bending over the scanner and it was quite a nice view. “Ok, I’m up to 1878. The canning business seems to be in full swing. The land notations come more frequently and I’m finding bank statements in there too and they took an anniversary trip to San Francisco and spent two nights in The Palace Hotel.” Rose turned and looked at the other woman. “That was nice reading.”

Rose smiled knowingly. “I agree with you on that one.”

“Willow has quit the post office so Ethan Rayne finally has it over at his store although he doesn’t seem to be there that often with all his trips to different cities. She’s also given up her work as telegraph operator to a town newcomer so she’s just working the farm full-time.”

Rose reached for the map dated 1878. “Here’s the map from that year.”

Mac took a look. “It seems like Tara, Willow, or Ethan own the entire area.”

Rose nodded. “Pretty accurate summary there.”

“Oh one more thing,” Mac said, “Willow’s started referring to a surprise she has planned for Tara but that she doesn’t know how she will possibly manage it.”

When the blonde saw the look of sadness in Rose’s eyes, Mac couldn’t help it. She crossed the room in a few soft steps and knelt down in front of her at the document box, reaching her hand out to touch the back of Rose’s hand. “What is it, Rose?”

Rose ran her other hand across her eyes and took a deep breath. “She’ll manage it.”

“What is it? And why does it make you so sad?” Mac couldn’t imagine what must have happened to make Rose feel it so deeply this many years later. She lifted her hand and gently laid two fingers along Rose’s jawline, somewhat surprised to feel the other girl lean into the touch. A little pressure, brought Rose’s face toward hers and Mac noticed, for the first time just how green Rose’s eyes were. “You have the most beautiful eyes I’ve ever seen.” She hadn’t consciously thought that yet the words hung in the staid air of the small room. Once she’d said them, she expected Rose to look away or stand and walk away. When she didn’t Mac leaned in to kiss her, the thought crossing her mind that she couldn’t have predicted the softness of those lips. And after a way too short few seconds, Rose did pull away and push herself to her feet.

She pulled out another journal and held it up for Mac to see. “You should really get reading or you’ll never figure out your mystery.” Her voice had a teasing tone so Mac could tell that she wasn’t mad about the kiss but at the same time, Mac still didn’t understand what the researcher was up to.

Mac spent the remainder of the afternoon reading an assortment of scanned documents from Willow’s glorius and increasingly cryptic journals to Tara’s letters to Miss Calendar, her father, and her brother Donnie. Tara had also begun copying down her recipes and ingredient lists while Willow calculated crop yield, rainfall, and costs for sugar and glass. All-in-all, the preserves business had proved a surprisingly lucrative endeavor for the two women. Toward the end of 1880, Mac realized that the letters to Philadelphia showed a marked sense of panic regarding Tara’s father’s health. Apparent discretion of the times kept Mac in the dark regarding the exact nature of his illness but it was clear that Tara and Donnie shared their concern regarding those health issues. Tara’s upset at being so far from her father as his health failed became more and more distinct, perhaps being emphasized in her late December, 1880 letter to Miss Calendar:

[blockquote]
I hope to see you soon although I can not imagine how I will make this difficult and unsafe journey alone. If I felt Daddy could spare him, I would ask Donnie to make the journey to fetch me but clearly, my brother can not leave Philadelphia at this time. At times like this, the danger into which we may fall simply by being a member of this gentle sex frustrates me greatly. I have fortune to make 100 train trips, a 1000 train trips perhaps, although I would have to ask dearest Willow the exact figures.

I would give anything to make this journey before it is too late that I might see you all again.

Missing you more than I can write,

Tara Maclay
[/blockquote]
“What’s wrong with Tara’s father?”

Rose shrugged her trademark move. “Cancer, Consumption… ? It’s 1880. He’s ‘ill’ and that’s about all the detail you’ll ever get.”

Mac accepted the answer and returned to her reading. On Christmas Willow presented Tara with even more acres and numerous beautiful gowns and again, detailed their affection. Tara gave her lover an abacus which the redhead immediately set about studying and mastering. According to Willow’s journal and Tara’s letters, it was clear that Mr. Maclay’s health deteriorated constantly. Finally, a suggested solution was reported in both the journal and the ensuing letter to Jenny Calendar.

[blockquote]I don’t know quite what to think of Uncle’s offer. I’ve always thought he was a snake just like daddy did. I have to give him credit he come all the way out to the cabin to present his offer. He says he’s got business to do out East and needs to go to New York. It wouldn’t be no problem, travelin Tara safely down to Philadelphia and then bringing her back out. He says it don’t matter if she needs to stay a week or three months.

I give him this. He always done treated my Tara with respect, not that I can say the same of a bunch of other girls round here. And I heard things back when I run the post office about his trips up to San Fransico. It ain’t nothin I’d talk to Tara ‘bout but I just heard things bout his hobbies.

Still, here comes my uncle doin’ about the first nice thing he ever offered under our being related and I can’t say no bad on him. Me and Tara tole him we got to figure it out but it’s a fine offer.[/blockquote]

“I’m scared to think about this,” Mac said outloud as she finished reading the entry dated January 24, 1881.

Rose didn’t answer but clicked on a file which Mac had now realized the numbering scheme indicated was a letter from Tara to Miss Calendar dated February 1, 1881.

[blockquote]
Mr. Rayne and I depart Sunnydale the Thursday after next. I can hardly believe that he happens to possess the need to travel to New York but he assures me that he does and has supplied myself and Willow with contact information for his legal representation there, with whom he requires services, and the address of the residence at which he will stay on his visit. Our tickets are bought and lodgings secured.

I can hardly believe our good fortune nor that I will see you in less than two weeks. Father sounds to be faltering and I only hope my presence will give him some peace.

Willow has withdrawn funds for my travel and I believe she has given her uncle further for his payment of certain expenses she feels I should remain shielded of. I believe I may have mentioned this before but she spoils me daily and I could not imagine one moment of my life without her. She assures me that she has wired additional funds to Donnie so I should be quite set on my journey.

Oh, I do wish my Willow could come as well both for my comfort and so that you could meet her. She is… I feel … still just thinking of her.

[/blockquote]
The letter continued with some of the minute that Mac had learned to skim over in reading the letters. “She’s traveling to Philadelphia with Rayne? Why is he going to New York? Does he even really need to go or is this just some plot?” She felt angry reading these latest documents and folded her arms over her chest.

Rose shook her head at the blonde and looked at the clock. “Time flies and I need to go. I have plans this evening.”

“Not with me, clearly.” When Rose didn’t answer Mac returned to her previous line of questioning. “Does he really have business in New York?”

Rose laughed again and clicked on a link.

Mac scanned the document, then read it more slowly. “These are the incorporation documents for Sunnyland Farms. They’re dated March 4, 1881 and filed in New York city.”

Rose nodded. “Yes, your 3GF genuinely had business to conduct.” Mac scanned them again and yet again, finally interrupted by Rose’s next question. “Do you see anything strange about them?”

Mac shrugged. “I’m not much for legalise. I mean they say the name, the address, a tax id type number, selling jellies …”

Rose leaned over and pointed the screen. “How about here?”

“Shareholders: Ethan Rayne, Sunnydale, CA – 70%, Richard Wilkins, Sunnydale, CA – 20%, Dawn Summers, San Francisco, CA – 10%.” She looked up with a puzzled look on her face. “Dawn? How would Dawn invest in this company?”

Rose smiled again. “Do you want to take that with you?” She pointed at the computer.

“If you don’t mind.”

Mac stayed nearly two hours longer reading and rereading the documents leading up to Tara’s departure from Sunnydale and still trying to figure out how this puzzle all fit together.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/24/2009

Postby Zampsa1975 » Thu Sep 24, 2009 3:48 pm

Yay for good update-y goodness... So the plot thickens...
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/24/2009

Postby writerfreak » Thu Sep 24, 2009 5:05 pm

Keeping me intrigued with every word. The trip with Ethan has me worried and concerned as I'm sure its supposed to. It also makes me sad that they were separated.

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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/24/2009

Postby Alcy » Thu Sep 24, 2009 5:56 pm

Hiya Deb,
Woohoo, a chapter in which I can jump on the bandwagon straight away!
Mac is incorrigible! But while she is that, she’s also learning and starting to see that there’s a whole other world out there besides the Paris Hilton-esque world of parties and sleeping with willing women.
Mac smiled. “Plus she does have that fresh, virginal vibe going for her.”

Ah, that’s a great vibe!
So it turns out that Willow was quite the property investor. I think it seems that most quarrels happen over land or women…and is this case you’ve got both. So I can hazard a guess at what causes their later misfortune.
When she didn’t Mac leaned in to kiss her, the thought crossing her mind that she couldn’t have predicted the softness of those lips.

A sweet, but all too brief kiss. Poor Mac is going to go out of her mind with all the teasing. She gets to read these really hot diary entries, she’s too wrapped up in Rose to think about anyone else…but all she gets from Rose is a brief kiss. And we don’t know how Rose feels about that kiss…she didn’t react in horror…so that has to be a good sign right?
I’m just as confused as Mac is at the end. It seems that Ethan Rayne has the majority shareholding in Sunnyland Farms, and I’m very worried by that. I’m not even coming close to understanding the puzzle yet, but I’m looking forward to the next chapter.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/24/2009

Postby ophelia11 » Sun Sep 27, 2009 9:26 pm

There's no such thing as shameless! At least not in my world.

I find it so funny that you mentioned it because I JUST finished the first yesterday morning and absolutely LOVED it. The characters you pulled in to the story were "used" wonderfully. Pairing Cordelia and Wilkins as the leadership of the town was such an interesting twist.

Tara was perfect as the not-quite-naive school marm. The time you spent developing her was evident. Here's this dynamic woman that won't dare stay in a saloon but makes a naughty reference to 'Long Lick' all on the same day. Fantastic.

Willow's narration sucked me in from the opening paragraph. Like any good storyteller, her personal observations about other towns folk or random events in town made the story. I especially enjoyed the sweet way she described her feelings for Tara, without any knowledge that she was actually falling in love. The first time they made love was so innocent and poignant, I'm speechless. :)

Seriously. Loved it. Easily one of the best I've read in a long time. Now I'm not very far along in the Revisit, so I will gush about that in a few days.

Thanks for sharing and revisiting. Fan-freakin-tastic!
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/24/2009

Postby JustSkipIt » Mon Sep 28, 2009 8:31 am

Zampsa1975 - Thanks so much. Yes, it's thicking and will thicken even more soon.

writerfreak - I'm glad you're intrigued.

The trip with Ethan has me worried and concerned as I'm sure its supposed to.
Yes. It should make you nervous for sure. That trip will be ... let's say important.

It also makes me sad that they were separated.
If I said ... "you just wait" would that be cruel?

Thanks so much.

Alcy - Hey there. Did you go over and read Impulse yet? It actually got even better with the latest update. I'm very impressed with Opheila's language and action flow. I don't remember any fic from her before so for a first-timer, it's extra impressed.

Woohoo, a chapter in which I can jump on the bandwagon straight away!
Before it's too late... We're actually nearing the end quite quickly. But the bandwagon appreciates you.

I agree about Mac's eyes being opened. I think it's sort of so foreign to her that she's kind of confused about what the hell is happening.

Virginal vibe - God. I can't even remember what the hell that is from personal experience. My wife and I are coming up on our 10 year anniversary. And before that... how do I put that? I was... not exactly virginal and quite honestly, I never found the thrill of the chase that exciting. Virgins... not my deal. Ok, TMI.

So it turns out that Willow was quite the property investor.
She was quite the investor all over. I'm having a little trouble with the exact acreage. I want them to have a sizeable amount but not the Hunt Ranch or something.

I think it seems that most quarrels happen over land or women…and is this case you’ve got both.
Both plus the old issue of Ethan not liking Ira or thinking he was good enough for Alice and wanting the post office at the store. Ethan's got a list of grievances on which to build his alleged plot.

So I can hazard a guess at what causes their later misfortune.
Oh come on. I want to hear the guess.

Lol. I love the idea of Mac being so sexually frustrated. Hell, she hasn't had sex in like 2 days so she's probably going into shock.

And we don’t know how Rose feels about that kiss…she didn’t react in horror…so that has to be a good sign right?
Yes. It's a good sign. Rose is much more... grounded than I think Mac could know. She's also got her own motives so we'll see where it all goes.
Confused is good. Ethan has and will always have the majority share of Sunnyland Farms. That's why Mac is such a spoiled heiress. I'm glad you're looking forward. Strangely enough, there are only a few left. It feels wierd that it's going to start rushing downhill fast now.


ophelia11 - Hey! You came over and read this. I'm stoked about that. I'm trying to direct people over to your thread (most particularly Alcy).

I find it so funny that you mentioned it because I JUST finished the first yesterday morning and absolutely LOVED it. The characters you pulled in to the story were "used" wonderfully. Pairing Cordelia and Wilkins as the leadership of the town was such an interesting twist.

Thanks so much. I had a very fun time writing it and could imagine Cordelia seeing Wilkins as the most eligible man in town.

Tara was perfect as the not-quite-naive school marm. The time you spent developing her was evident. Here's this dynamic woman that won't dare stay in a saloon but makes a naughty reference to 'Long Lick' all on the same day. Fantastic.
Nice pickup on the contrast there. That sort of contrast will sort of come up again in a coming chapter. I also think that she's basically been brought up "right" to be a lady or lady-like but also realized and came to terms with her personal preference at an early age. Her comment is meant 1/2 just to amuse herself and 1/2 to feel out Willow a bit. Sort of like those "I'm a friend of Bill's..." leadins.

I'm glad you were amused by Willow's narration and her comments about the townsfolk. Yes, her first time she was very very innocent.

Seriously. Loved it. Easily one of the best I've read in a long time. Now I'm not very far along in the Revisit, so I will gush about that in a few days.
I can hardly wait.

All - So I'm totally shocked at how quickly this story is coming to an end. I thought I only had two more updates but I've cut the next one in half so I think there will be three updates left. The truth is that when I first started thinking of this, I imagined something of 4-5 updates. Then I started to plan it out and thought it would be about 10 which is actually just about right on target.

Also, my family went camping this weekend and I started telling my wife about this story. Now, understand that she became "bored" of W/T about 5 years ago and rarely listens to anything about my writing nor does she read my work. But this story... she kept gasping and saying, "I thought you liked them!" and "how could you?" But she liked it very much.
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Re: Love Comes to Long Lick Revisited - Updated 09/24/2009

Postby shiraz » Tue Sep 29, 2009 10:30 am

I love your writing! I'm sad to hear this one is almost over, but I'm grateful for the 10 wondreful chapters you've written :) I've been enjoying this story from the beginning - sorry for neglecting to submit feedback.

I love it when Mac gets to be outrageous and sexually assertive and all kinds of confident. I love that Rose has the strength to say no to her (I'm sure I wouldn't!) and that she's hooking her on the tragic love story so she's attached to a just outcome for Willow's descendents.

Can't wait to see how the truth/proof is revealed and what role Mac plays in justice being served. Willow's gran is awesome and it's sweet how Willow dotes on her. Though I think its high time for her to spread her wings and have airplane sex with Tara. :pray

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
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